Talk:JT Fox's Sly and Tracy At the Bus Stop

I must confess a certain weakness for your Sly Fox stories, thank you for writing another one. Though if you'd like a bit of critique, Tracy seems to accept Sly sooner than can be reasonably believed. Even if Xanadu was widely known and accepted at this point, one would still be wary of someone as... peculiar as Sly. You may also wish to expand on the TF process itself as well as the overall description of events as this story seems to lack some of the quality shared by the other stories in this series. --Lloyd 11:05, 8 August 2009 (UTC)

Sadly, I agree with Lloyd. The other Sly Fox stories really impressed me (except for the occasional grammatical error, but that's understandable), but this one...not so much. Like what Lloyd said, you seem to have cut off several bits that continue the willing suspension of disbelief thing, and the story is mainly conveyed through conversation, making it flow less well. It'd be better if you threw in more descriptions. If you don't mind an amateur's opinion, I'd say that it seemed like you were trying to cut a long story short, and in the process you removed several bits and pieces, like additional dialog between the two characters or descriptions of the TF. Still, thanks for another Sly Fox story! —Drake 01:44, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Sadly, JT is suffering with Summer school and doesn't have time for Sly. He wrote this short one a while ago purely as a favor to me. There was actually a much longer story that was written only halfway before he lost interest. that took place after Sly had begun to turn his hotel into a haven for Xanadu victims who were just a little too weird to assimilate back into society (and as a rule, he only toonifies his xanadu-victim tenants if they ask for it in some way, which isn't that surprisingly often). And he was trying to convince a wheel chair bound man who was once a cabby in round about to request being turned into a toon taxi...but the man's bitterness mean it wasn't going well and could have possibly mounted to being Sly's first defeat... --Alex Warlorn 2009-08-08

Dang. Any chance we could see that story as a WIP/hiatus piece though? --Lloyd 04:00, 10 August 2009 (UTC)