Talk:Now I am become Seth, the destroyer of worlds

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Wow, a new story so soon. You write pretty fast. Can't wait for the next parts! --Drake, 12:07, 25 June 2009 (+0800 GMT)

How I envy your ability to come up with ideas... my story has been stalled for over two weeks XD --Lloyd

I mow the lawn to come up with ideas. Really. When I get really bored, I think about these things. Plus, I couldn't let a title like this go unused. I happen to write parodys, and I've wanted to use Openheimers quote (which he actually got from the Hindu bible) for a long time. Oh, and fun fact: Haven,Maine is the fictonal town where "The Tommyknockers" takes place. See what I did there?--Guvnor Of Space 17:42, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

Hmm...A nice ending, but not really what I expected. When I hear (or read) the words "Destroyer of Worlds" it makes me think of this really, friggin powerful guy with a gun the size of the Empire State Building and totally ready to blow up some stuff. Or, more realistically, a person with vast amounts of power at his disposal and is also prepared to use that power for destructive means. However, your story seems to just end off like...that. There wasn't any huge showdown that displayed Seth's supposedly huge powers. Somehow, Seth getting defeated so easily seems somewhat anticlimatic. Just Brown, sitting in Seth's house, and Seth doesn't even put up a fight? The least I'd expect was that he'd duck and roll, grab a hidden weapon and fire, and then Brown runs...etc, etc.
Mmm...unless it was supposed to be a parody. But I honestly feel that the title itself had a lot of potential for a huge climax. Think about it. A reader goes flipping through the "All Stories" section, sees this totally cool title. He thinks, "Wow, a Destroyer of Worlds! Leet!", but then he'd read on to find Seth so easily defeated. I don't mean to insult: please don't be offended. It's still a great story, but I expected it to turn out differently. --Drake, 15:25, 26 June 2009