User talk:Mona Lisa/Being Tanda

This story presents realistic questions if reality DIDN'T change if someone got TFed into their furry persona and didn't get mental changed either. And how you can have a functional life.

I figured that it would have been blood from the pet cat's claws ambush that would tip off her sister.

Her sister seems a bit too excited at her brother having changed genders. And her sister also appears to have some natural bias against males. Any chance of that being why they drifted apart, or was it something else?

Any real reason why Jaz hasn't worn that skirt before?

I'm sadly dissapointed in silvercat, given how he acted like a perfect gentleman from the moment they met to when Tanda woke up on the couch, and it wasn't even his idea for her to visit his house, I'm wonder what the heck happened to cause his personality to turn 180 degrees like that!! (There's also the fact he knows where she lives.)

Looking foreword to reading more. The story so far has been amazing. In particular how in spite of the singular strangeness of what happened to Tim, the rest of the story appear to be going pretty realistically, with Tanda the stranger in a strange land.

--Alex Warlorn 2008 Eight day of Christ Mass.

Thank you!

Alex, thank you for your comments, I really appreciate that you took the time to give well-thought-out notes. I realize that Silvercat's betrayal seemed a bit out of the blue. I'll be writing some more from his perspective to fill in the gap, so hopefully that will help. Not so much as to make the act forgivable, just make more sense.

I'm also glad you appreciate what I think is a unique perspective. As far as I know, there aren't many other Furry TFs from this "realistic" point of view where there isn't a significant amount of personality alteration.

I won't say any more so as to not spoil anything except: thanks for the positive and helpful comments! You totally inspired me to work some more on the story. Coming soon, I promise!

--Mona Lisa 2008, January 12th

Added some more conversation at the beach, lengthened the scene of the attack to give a bit more of Silvercat's perspective, and added a shopping trip. =D

--Mona Lisa 2008, January 13th

Still following the basic premise of 'fantasy stuck in reality without any super powers' I see, and it's WORKING.

Thanks for not making Silver vanish into thin air after he 'served his purpose' of giving Tanda her first taste of dark ugly female reality. It would have felt cheap.

And Christine did make a point about the whole credit card thingie. Reminds me almost of the cursed vixen costume story on the original Transformation Story Archive (and I do mean cursed).

Alex Warlorn, 2008, January 20th.

Added some fun stuff: meeting with Wendy, some stuff on FurryMUCK and so forth.

--Mona Lisa 2008, March 16th

"But wasn't Tanda supposed to be witty? Social? Outgoing? Wasn't that the reason she'd made the wish?" She has a very good point. What the point of the wish, of all she gets is the window dressing? Since she's sort of a reculsive, she shouldn't have TOO much trouble living a normal life as long as she doesn't get pulled in jury duty or need a doctor's appointment, or something else where she'd end up making headline news. I seriously doubt she'd be disected like in the movie, but some people might think she's infected by some alien plague.

But back slight on topic, if 'Tanda' is supposed to have the personality traits that Tim desired, shouldn't she have gotten those as part of the package deal? Though then Tim would no longer be Tim, but since she's already calling herself Tanda and having that be that on that subject, I doubt she'd be scared to take that last step.

It seems the wish didn't work out as planned then, if he just got Tanda's form, but not her personality traits.

--Alex Warlorn 2008 March 20th

I find this story to be quite refreshing. It takes the gender and species transformation as a simple given, and focuses on what the real life implications would be if this actually could happen to someone.

You have done an excellent job pacing the story. Things happen at a nice clip, without feeling rushed or forced.

I find Tim's/Tanda's reactions to be pretty realistic, other than his (her?) being quite a bit calmer upon discovering her transformation than I think even someone who truly wished they could transform would have reacted.

I must admit that I too was surprised and disappointed that Jeremy moved in on Tanda the way he did. Brushing her cheek and listening to her purr would have been a bit daring but OK, the fact that he just assumed that he could do in real life what he did online was a disappointing surprise, but does a good job of making for a fuller and deeper story. After all, if he had been able to just show up and make everything OK for Tanda, you would have had a short and shallow story.

Tanda's ability to deal with shopping for and wearing women's clothing as comfortably as she did indicates to me that there has been some mental changes as well. (In fact, her standing up to Jeremy as assertively as she did is probably also not in keeping with Tim's original personality.) It remains to be seen if the rest of Tim's wished for personality traits show up in Tanda on their own, or if they remain a goal that she will have to work towards, perhaps with the help of the shrink she's been sent off to.

I'm a bit surprised that Tanda wasn't able to convince the HR rep that she was not wearing a costume. I would have thought that just opening her mouth wide and showing no gap around her mouth would have been enough. I guess too much Hollywood special effects in movies have people falsely convinced that they can make costumes that are impossible to tell from reality!

Given her having been burned a few times already, I would have thought that the inconsistency of being in class or not would have made Tanda more cautious about assuming that Kirofox was Kira. She should have explicitly asked rather than assume. Either it really is Kira (though I doubt it), or obviously a lead to the next part of the story.

It will be interesting to see if Tanda actually makes it to the con, and if so seeing everyone's reactions.

Hope you are able to continue updating this story - it has a lot of potential.

--The Lurker Below 2008 August 4

Pity to see this story haven't gone anywhere. It was so unique, so well thought out and logical without CHEATING to make it a bad situation by default. --Alex Warlorn 04:13, 19 August 2011 (UTC)