Talk:The Tower in the Torch

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Nice opening, no prizes for guessing what's about to happen though ;) --Fibio 15:51, 25 August 2009 (UTC)

Considering that I've written two stories where he's a fox... not really, no =D -- Lloyd Brunnel 16:25, 25 August 2009 (UTC)

Good start, Lloyd. I like the character and this is a rather decent story. -- ShadowWolf 21:50, 25 August 2009 (UTC)

I agree with everything said above. This is looking to be a great introduction for Jonas. --Concerned Reader 23:15, 25 August 2009 (UTC)

Oh yeah! Great intro for Jonas, I can't wait for the next part! :) —Drake 08:00, 26 August 2009 (UTC)

How to vocalize

The next part of this story has Jonas trying to talk, but I'm not sure how to write it out. Foxes don't make the same types of sounds as other canines/candids so I can't just do things like "rawr" and whatnot. I've been looking over http://www.foxforest.org/upclose/voicescarry.shtml since this page has recordings of fox voices but I'm still stumped. Any suggestions? --Lloyd Brunnel 17:39, 26 August 2009 (UTC)

I've never known how to write out animal noises, other than describing what they may sound like. Onomatopoeia are hard like that... --Concerned Reader 18:16, 26 August 2009 (UTC)

Stumped Again =(

Blarg! Writer's block attacks again! I know I want Sam's role in this story to be based around powering through and right now I want her to be making Jonas do something but I can't figure out what. My current idea is that she makes him help her decorate the rest of the house but ironically I can't think of how he'd do that given his physical limitations. Anyone have a suggestion? --Lloyd Brunnel 14:41, 30 August 2009 (UTC)

Hmm. Maybe she starts decorating with gingerbread cookies or small flower bouquets; that seems like it would be appropriate for the circumstances -- visually festive as well as providing an interesting aroma. And it seems like Jonas would be the only one able to position them to cover the house without the odor being overwhelming in any one spot. If you don't like that particular idea, try thinking along those same lines; how would you decorate differently if someone in your family was suddenly much more interested in odor and less interested in sight? Phaedrus 16:05, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
It's not that he's more interested in odor--true it's now stronger than his sight in terms of range and degree but he'd be up close to whatever he's working on so it wouldn't be that much of an issue. The idea here is that Sam wants to keep Jonas as busy as possible, both to keep his mind occupied and to make him adapt to his body. This might be easier if I actually did any decorating around the holidays... what needs to be done other than a tree and putting tinsel on stair banisters? --Lloyd Brunnel 16:25, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
The problem with answering that is that there's no consistency -- I don't think I've ever been in two houses that were decorated for Christmas in the same way. On the bright side, that means that you can get away with anything. But here's one option: One of my old coworkers' families didn't go with the traditional huge tree in the living room; they had small trees (maybe just 3') in every room in the house, and a larger tree (but still not as large as usual) in the living room for the presents. And every one of those trees was decorated. A fox could probably handle putting the ornaments up on at least the majority of a small tree like that. 24.17.111.80 16:43, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
You've just given me a brainwave, thank you very much. --Lloyd Brunnel 16:56, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
Well... no, not really... just got a small idea out of this. I guess I need to think through what I actually want to happen in this first XD --Lloyd Brunnel 18:49, 30 August 2009 (UTC)

Heads Up

Although not technically "on hiatus", progress on this story will either be slow or non existent since my friend's birthday is coming up and I want to write a story for him. In the meantime, if anyone has any comments about how they feel the story is progressing, I would love to hear them. --Lloyd Brunnel 23:31, 3 September 2009 (UTC)