User talk:Alveric

I'm well on my way to finishing my third story here, so I'd best say something about myself. I stumbled upon this whole TF thing entirely by accident. On a slow day at work, I found some mermaid TF sories while idly surfing through websites about mermaids. I have a soft place in my heart for these mythical beings (not that anyone would notice). These stories led me to TSA, where I've read most of the stories and found myself hooked. I began feeling the urge to write again (it had been ten years since my last fiction). That is when I found Shifti and TSAT. Since I'm more comfortable with the wiki format, this is where I've been posting my works. I hope you all like them.

Alveric

Comments

Okay, it'll take me a couple days to actually decide if I want to give in and do editorial critiques for you, but I'm willing to say that I've enjoyed what you have written, even if I feel that its all a bit too short. However, with that said let me congratulate you a little on the scene-setting and the way you followed the first-person restrictions. There is quite a bit you could do by playing around with the "unreliable narrator" bit, but I think you've managed to capture a lot of the feeling of the chaos of the event. -- ShadowWolf 23:00, 14 February 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your comments. I'm very glad to hear that you enjoyed my work. I agree, I do tend to cut things too short. It's almost as though I can't wait to get to the next scene. I'll work on that. I think I know what you mean by "unreliable narrator", but could you elaborate on that or direct me to where there is more about that? --Alveric

"Unreliable Narrator" refers to an effect that is particularly easy to achieve in a first-person story. Unless you are actively pushing to be as non-judgemental and impartial as possible (something Heinlein posited was a learnable trait - hence the "Fair Witness" peoples in some of his novels) then any narration is going to be colored by the beliefs, morals and experiences of the narrator. I put this to fair use in "Ripples In Time" and also in "Kill Me If You Can". In both stories the narrator makes an effort to not confuse the reader with their non-human POV's, but in both cases the whole story is only fully understandable if you can get past the narrators POV and see the whole story.

"Ripples In Time" is a good example to follow for some cases, if just because it is a Xanadu story. I don't recommend going as far as I did with the narrator - since I've had a lot of complaints about that one being confusing - but... Anyway... If I can find the time and motivation sometime this week, I might actually put on the "editor" hat again and give at least one of your stories a critical going over. -- ShadowWolf 19:10, 15 February 2011 (UTC)

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