User talk:ShadowWolf/Death and Rebirth

Small quibble, but you mispelled "skiing" as "skying".

Page is a work in progress and is on hiatus. I have done no real editing on it yet. -- ShadowWolf 00:29, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Plasma balls

Just thought I'd mention this. I'm enjoying the read so far, and definitely like the detail that goes into it, but it seems like your just kinda glazing over the plasma balls. I know the page is in flux, especially the fighting scenes, but describing throwing plasma like you would describe breathing just seems to lessen the impact of him being able to throw plasma. Maybe go into the feeling of the ball charging, or mention his hair raising on end. Much like Oberon did in Enter a Wolf. A kind of static-y feeling or something. I hope I brought across the point I wanted to, because I'm terrible at explaining what I mean. --Concerned Reader 16:55, 9 June 2009 (UTC)