User talk:Mona Lisa/Being Tanda

This story presents realistic questions if reality DIDN'T change if someone got TFed into their furry persona and didn't get mental changed either. And how you can have a functional life.

I figured that it would have been blood from the pet cat's claws ambush that would tip off her sister.

Her sister seems a bit too excited at her brother having changed genders. And her sister also appears to have some natural bias against males. Any chance of that being why they drifted apart, or was it something else?

Any real reason why Jaz hasn't worn that skirt before?

I'm sadly dissapointed in silvercat, given how he acted like a perfect gentleman from the moment they met to when Tanda woke up on the couch, and it wasn't even his idea for her to visit his house, I'm wonder what the heck happened to cause his personality to turn 180 degrees like that!! (There's also the fact he knows where she lives.)

Looking foreword to reading more. The story so far has been amazing. In particular how in spite of the singular strangeness of what happened to Tim, the rest of the story appear to be going pretty realistically, with Tanda the stranger in a strange land.

--Alex Warlorn 2008 Eight day of Christ Mass.

Thank you!

Alex, thank you for your comments, I really appreciate that you took the time to give well-thought-out notes. I realize that Silvercat's betrayal seemed a bit out of the blue. I'll be writing some more from his perspective to fill in the gap, so hopefully that will help. Not so much as to make the act forgivable, just make more sense.

I'm also glad you appreciate what I think is a unique perspective. As far as I know, there aren't many other Furry TFs from this "realistic" point of view where there isn't a significant amount of personality alteration.

I won't say any more so as to not spoil anything except: thanks for the positive and helpful comments! You totally inspired me to work some more on the story. Coming soon, I promise!

--Mona Lisa 2008, January 12th

Added some more conversation at the beach, lengthened the scene of the attack to give a bit more of Silvercat's perspective, and added a shopping trip. =D

--Mona Lisa 2008, January 13th

Still following the basic premise of 'fantasy stuck in reality without any super powers' I see, and it's WORKING.

Thanks for not making Silver vanish into thin air after he 'served his purpose' of giving Tanda her first taste of dark ugly female reality. It would have felt cheap.

And Christine did make a point about the whole credit card thingie. Reminds me almost of the cursed vixen costume story on the original Transformation Story Archive (and I do mean cursed).

Alex Warlorn, 2008, January 20th.