User talk:Jetfire/Doing Hard Time
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Okay. Comments.
I like this one overall, there's more of a Plot then the Veil stories, and with some work you can emphasize that some more.
The Field issue and the TG was handled pretty well. Poor Justine's time in solitary really made her really think of herself as a girl, didn't it? I liked how you handled how she now looked as a human woman from the outside, too.
At this point, I think we've seen enough TGed as main characters and need to keep it from flooding the setting. --Buck 14:30, 24 February 2008 (EST)