User talk:WolfyDrake95/Letting Go

Sorry for not being on sooner. I've gotten lazy these past few weeks, so I haven't been on.

I skimmed through the story, and the writing, prose, and all that seem good. It's just not my type of story. I really don't like reading depressing things, though I may write them on occasion. Sorry I couldn't be more helpful. --Concerned Reader 05:59, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Nah, it's okay. Honestly though, I had high hopes for this story when it came up, imagining it to be about as good as Finding Himself. But when this got halfway through production...it didn't turn out the way I'd imagined it. Nothing ever does. Still, I didn't want to abandon another story, so I just finished it and posted. Admittedly lousy, I don't blame Shadow when he says that it didn't interest him. In hindsight, I believe too many dumb sad stories get a little boring. I'm planning some "happier" ones, though managing which ones I write is a little tough. I'm grappling with about three or four right now (Last Man Standing, in production, two Xanadu stories, also in production, and a continuation for my Paradise series, which took the back seat recently). Sucks when I get the ideas, but not enough time.

On the upside, though, I'm also planning an assasination story, and I'm sorta thinking...Chakona Space, Pig and Whistle, or the Assassin's Creed universe? Tough choice. By the way, does PaW have any big wars or conflict (open hostility and civil unrest works too) directly preceding, or ongoing during, the main storyline, and lots of anti-fur discrimination? These play an important role in my idea, and PaW seems the most promising universe for it, being the one that's already cut out for furs, and is the one I am most familiar with. I'll be going through those timelines of yours—here's a thanks in advance! :)

—Drake 06:49, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

ShadowWolf knows a lot more about PaW than I do, but as far as I remember, the major conflicts were when Canada was sweeping down into the leftovers of the USA. But because you're from Singapore, you could start a story section over on that side of the world.

Here's some times for conflict:

2008-09: the start of the collapse, and first infections.

2011: the New Confederacy is formed. They could be the assasinators, as they are a very Anarchistic group.

2015: Most fighting stops. NAR stabilizes. New confederacy mostly gone. A splinter cell could cause some trouble.

2020: this is when Allan's hometown is bombed. After this, there is almost no figting in the greater NAR area. Some outlying areas could still have trouble with the Confederacy.

Thats the best I can do for now. If the character is going to be sticking around, I would recommend creating a character timeline page as well. It helps define the character's traits and description so that it stays constant across stories.

PAW needs some more authors, so I look forward to whatever you may come up with. Though by about 2020, most persecution in the north American region seems to have stopped, an earlier assassination plot could be a good setup for a character. --Concerned Reader 14:03, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Hmm...I think PaW works, because my mind's already working out the kinks of the story. Well, I'll tell you what I'm planning now. SPOILER WARNING!!!

Price in Blood—At the very end of some conflict (2015?), there is a skirmish between TFORs and an anti-TFOR splinter cell. This is when the main character's parents are killed, and the leader of the splinter cell finds him, takes him in, and slowly nurtures a hatred for TFORs, fuelled by his parents' deaths. Or, alternatively, his parents could have been the victims of the Brown incident (see Lloyd's Case Briefing: Leon v. Stewart, but I haven't asked him yet), and died thereof. Same thing happens with the cell.

Then the main character is trained, and within years (2019?) he is sent on his first mission for the cell: to go assassinate an outspoken pro-TFOR activist who's promoting TFOR equality and all that. The first time, a sniper attack is attempted; it fails, and the main character resorts to a direct knifing, etc. But then the main character catches the Torch, and collapses at the crucial moment of the assassination.

The activist doesn't press charges on accounts of his age, but instead sends the main character to a friend's house (Allan himself, perhaps? That'd be a nice crossover) to recuperate, where it is revealed that the M.C. has caught the TFOR. As the M.C. deals with TFOR, the activist's friend starts to tell him about the TFOR community, and the M.C realizes that TFORs aren't all bad. Suddenly doubting his upbringing, he begins to investigate his parents' deaths, eventually finding a human survivor of that skirmish years ago. Then the M.C. finds out that actually it was the splinter cell who killed his parents; he goes back there to kill that leader, and succeeds.

Admittedly I haven't thought of the very, very ending: perhaps the police arrest him? That would be an interesting ending, despite being sad.

This story, being in the idea stage, is very loose. If you've got any good ideas, feel free to tell me! If ShadowWolf is reading this, then his advice would be crucial too! And if Allan is to be featured, I'll need a bunch of details about him, and probably you'll have to vet and monitor the dialog. The last time I featured someone else's character (awesome writer Jetfire's AT), I think I wrote her in terribly. My fault, of course. I still have trouble believing that I was forgiven for screwing up the Paradise universe. But I digress.

If I've got your permission to use Allan, I'll probably be bugging you a lot. Or, we could use that nifty EtherPad to pull the partial collab. Tell me what you think!

PS, forgive me for putting a reference to Allan in this story. I couldn't resist it. I have some problems. :) —Drake 14:30, 4 August 2009 (UTC)