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Comments on the Director's Cut

Still enjoying the added Intie society angle. Also, as a fan of Friendship Is Magic, I approve of the additional references. I think I have seen more Chakat Universe references in the director's cut stories than I remember in the old versions too. That was the first online fiction setting I got interested in, so it's fun to see those references too. One of the great things about this setting to me is that the 20th century pop culture craze makes references and pseudo-crossovers quite natural.

Rhianna and Kaylee’s home the upper level of that building, fitted out as an apartment.
Missing a word or two in that sentence.
Rochelle had her own place by the park, though sometimes crashed on Rhianna’s couch.
I don't think it's actually an error, but I think it would sound more natural to say "though she sometimes crashed on Rhianna’s couch."
“You don’t make DINS with ‘practice,’ they come from the technomages alone!”
DINs should have a lower-case s.

--Antimatter (talk) 22:46, 24 February 2016 (CST)