User talk:MatthiasRat/Confession Building

Wonderful story

It's so great to see you writing Paradise again. I really enjoyed this story. It's funny, from the title I went into it expecting one kind of "confession", but then it turned out to have a double meaning. I like that.

I also liked how you managed to avoid the clich� that being Changed makes you somehow superhuman. (I haven't done as well with that in my own Paradise stories, I fear. :P) You hit exactly the right tone with the abduction, and Christopher's life being saved by the difference in height was (while not unexpected) a great touch.

The confession to the priest was handled well, too. After that, showing the scene with Leslie in detail would have been redundant. I do hope that in your next installment you will go into her subsequent reactions to the whole thing, though.

Again, excellently done, and please write more soon! �User:Robotech Master 05:00, 11 October 2009 (UTC)

Thank you, Robotech! I've actually been working on this story for quite some time. Given the content, I didn't want to write this the way I normally did, which was by posting it in pieces on Shifti and editing here. I knew to make this piece work, I had to nail it out of the gate. And given that the content is very different from my usual fare (I too have to resist making my characters overly heroic in the usual sense) it just took longer to write. As for my next Paradise story, I will not fail to discuss Leslie's new perspective on the situation. I hope to start it soon. :-)

Thanks again! --User:MatthiasRat 09:18, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

I agree with RM. It's impressive how you made Christopher's reaction to the hijacking one of fear and avoided the Changed-person-uses-abilities-gained-by-new-body-and-trashes-attacker-on-the-spot-and-winds-up-totally-winning cliche, just like what RM said. Christopher's reaction later, likened to that of a cornered animal, is a nice way of ending off the conflict. And RM's right: the height difference thing was excellent (though it took me a couple of seconds to understand). The emotions in the story were expressed very well. I particularly like the ending; it's short, just a few two-word statements, but it has the impact and it works. Very, very well. Thanks for this great story! --User:WolfyDrake95 14:44, 11 October 2009 (UTC)

Thank you, Drake! Like I said to RM, this was a hard story to write for all the reasons you liked it. I'm delighted to know it worked. Thank you. :-) --User:MatthiasRat 09:18, 14 October 2009 (UTC)