User talk:Concerned Reader/Lotka Volterra

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Revision as of 00:31, 10 June 2011 by Concerned Reader (talk | contribs) (Yo dawg, you gots to re-silver for ever new line.)
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Hullooo, CR, I just thought I'd leave a message here since it looked awfully empty. Come on, other guys, come critique this or something!

Well, actually I've already told you what I think of the piece. It's a really neat piece, and I thought it was pretty original for the PaW universe. It's well-written and I liked the way it ran. Characters and their voices are distinctive and interesting to read. Still, I think you could elaborate a little more on the emotions Lotka feels when he encounters and glues himself to Jon; also, you could totally expand more on their relationship. There's a lot of potential for depth there! Okay, see you around. Cheers! :) —Wolfy 04:43, 10 June 2011 (UTC)

Hey, thanks! Yeah, there's still a lot of character development that needs to be dispersed throughout it. I'll see what I can get done over the summer. --Concerned Reader 05:31, 10 June 2011 (UTC)

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