User talk:Concerned Reader/Lotka Volterra

Hullooo, CR, I just thought I'd leave a message here since it looked awfully empty. Come on, other guys, come critique this or something!

Well, actually I've already told you what I think of the piece. It's a really neat piece, and I thought it was pretty original for the PaW universe. It's well-written and I liked the way it ran. Characters and their voices are distinctive and interesting to read. Still, I think you could elaborate a little more on the emotions Lotka feels when he encounters and glues himself to Jon; also, you could totally expand more on their relationship. There's a lot of potential for depth there! Okay, see you around. Cheers! :) —Wolfy 04:43, 10 June 2011 (UTC)