Talk:Revenge

Ah, a sequel. In case you're wondering, I did enjoy the first story. It was quite well written, but punctuation is something you'd want to look out for. I think you're thinking faster than you're typing, and so in an effort to keep up with your head, you miss punctuations and stuff. I can see a few errors in this new story as well.

Oh, and by the way, I'd like to point out something, since you've only just started this story: most stories are written in the past tense, not the present tense. Now I'm not sure how tense affects anything, but since this is only the early stages of this story, it's not too late to change. If you want to. Ask ShadowWolf for a proper critique if you need one: everyone expects the awesome ShadowWolf to critique us. Why? Because he's awesome. Go figure.

Anyway, all I'd like to say is that the first story was great, and I have high expectations for this one too. :)

PS I just didn't feel like commenting in your first story's talk page. Sorry. --Drake 06:34, 21 July 2009 (UTC)