User talk:WolfyDrake95/Finding Himself

I'm not sure how to say this, but I think I need to say something.

Now, I'm not sure of you're own age; but as an underage writer, this is extremely well written. I'm also under 21, and this story resonates with a part of my life. Specifically the six years I spent in California. I was out of phase with the rest of the world up there, and my few friends didn't stick around. So for me, the emotional content was presented very well.

A bit too well, perhaps, which leads me to believe that you are still experiencing some of what is presented here. I wish I could say that my writings aren't as based on my life as they are, but that would be a lie. A facade. I too am very good at facades. Put on the face of the day, show what people want to see, not what you feel; but that's a great way of building up emotions. And when you can no longer hold them back, they overflow. Hopefully when it happens you're alone, otherwise all they see is weakness. I showed a lot of weakness in California, and it caused me a lot of grief.

Now, I never really thought about suicide, it just seemed detrimental to the advancement of my life, but I have written about it. Specifically a short film script called Internal Conflict. That one wierded out my parents. They almost sent me to a psychologist for it. My writings can be pretty dark, and they are usually driven by dark experiences in my life. The only thing that got me through California was one good friend, and a firm belief that God had something better for me down the road.

Even now I'm somewhat of an escapist. I'll read about others problems, instead of fixing my own. Books, Video games, movies, and even music are all a way out of the real world. Even my writings are an escape from the desert of the real. For a few hours a night, I can do terrible things to someone else, but have it turn out alright.

If you're ever pissed about life in high school, just watch "Little Miss Sunshine," That always cheers me up.

Back to your story, I really do like it. I enjoy man vs self conflicts, so you might even think of making it into a short story, or small series. A continuation would not be unwelcome. You might even mod it to fit into a story universe. Pig and Whistle is needing some starting authors and characters.

--Concerned Reader 18:18, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I'm fourteen, so it was based on my own life, quite directly, though I don't think I'll ever run into such a person ever, and I've never bought an online spell kit. Life has convinced me that it's a cruel world out there. Yes, a facade of smiles, running away from life in the solace of a good game of Halo, yeah, that's my life. Too much work, too many projects...it feels like the world's out to get me. It's just too risky letting anyone, even my parents, know all my little depressions...so I have to get them out by the means of a story.

I'm happy to learn that it "resonates" with you. Though the story didn't come out quite right, it's great to learn that someone's been through this kind of situation as well. Thanks! And as for a sequel...well, I was considering one too. :) --Drake 11:14, 22 June 2009

I'm 18 now, but in California I was more around your age. It seems we have a lot in common. Though your writing is much better than mine was back then. Think of your life now as character development. In any good story, the characters are developed through experiences into what they will become. Most people find that character development is boring to read/watch, but I seem to enjoy it. Without a properly developed character, the people fall flat on the page, staying two dimensional. So if you want to be a fully developed, three dimensional character later in life, you'll have to sit through all this development. At 14, you're a little too young to be worrying about what to do with your life. I'm still not sure what I'm going to do with mine. College is around the corner, and I'm going into Computer Science. That leaves me with many options later in life. Most of which are in a field I'll enjoy.

As it is now, Halo isn't my favorite game universe. For me, I enjoy the story aspect of games, and Halo's story has always seemed a little lacking. My current favorites are the Half-Life series, COD4, L4D, Fallout 3, Portal, and some old point and click adventure stuff. I'm a pc gamer, so that's where most of my games live. I do recommend picking up "The Orange Box." --Concerned Reader 04:26, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

Really? Halo, lacking? I beg to differ. :) I appreciate the storyline aspect of the games, but I find that Halo has a rather compelling storyline. Perhaps I'm just too big a fan. And its gameplay is awesome: a larger variety of stuff as compared to most other games. I'm more of an Xbox gamer (Xbox tends to have a larger amount of good games). In fact, I'm actually busy with a TF story set in the Halo Universe.

As for character development, yeah, it does get a little boring for most people. But what is a story when every character is just the same? That wouldn't be a story, would it? Every character has fundamental differences in personality that sets them apart from each other. I agree, character developments rock.

I've actually got this plan for my life, reflected in the story, how I plan to grab a place in some college in the US (I live in Singapore), then do Computer Science and head over to Bungie to grab a job. But now that I know what it'll take, how much money, and luck, and time is involved, suddenly it all seems like a wild dream...--Drake 13:04, 22 June 2009