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{{Green|Hey, thanks! Yeah, there's still a lot of character development that needs to be dispersed throughout it. I'll see what I can get done over the summer.}} --[[User:Concerned Reader|Concerned Reader]] 05:31, 10 June 2011 (UTC) | {{Green|Hey, thanks! Yeah, there's still a lot of character development that needs to be dispersed throughout it. I'll see what I can get done over the summer.}} --[[User:Concerned Reader|Concerned Reader]] 05:31, 10 June 2011 (UTC) | ||
:{{Silver|Sweet, go for it! Also, I am sensing potential for sequels! By the way, I've completely forgetten how to use wikicode around here. Sorry about that. I'll try picking it up as I go.}} —[[User:WolfyDrake95|Wolfy]] 14:47, 10 June 2011 (UTC) | |||
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Hullooo, CR, I just thought I'd leave a message here since it looked awfully empty. Come on, other guys, come critique this or something!
Well, actually I've already told you what I think of the piece. It's a really neat piece, and I thought it was pretty original for the PaW universe. It's well-written and I liked the way it ran. Characters and their voices are distinctive and interesting to read. Still, I think you could elaborate a little more on the emotions Lotka feels when he encounters and glues himself to Jon; also, you could totally expand more on their relationship. There's a lot of potential for depth there! Okay, see you around. Cheers! :) —Wolfy 04:43, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
Hey, thanks! Yeah, there's still a lot of character development that needs to be dispersed throughout it. I'll see what I can get done over the summer. --Concerned Reader 05:31, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
- Sweet, go for it! Also, I am sensing potential for sequels! By the way, I've completely forgetten how to use wikicode around here. Sorry about that. I'll try picking it up as I go. —Wolfy 14:47, 10 June 2011 (UTC)