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	:The '''Dream Chaser''' had fore and aft retractable pulse cannons and two dozen of Kaylee’s favored micro-missiles in underwing FAST paks—the weapons were temporary, at least.		:The '''Dream Chaser''' had fore and aft retractable pulse cannons and two dozen of Kaylee’s favored micro-missiles in underwing FAST paks—the weapons were temporary, at least.
	::In ~~''Spaceflight of Fancy''~~ it was "Dreamchaser," which I think works a little better. (Or at least it matches with Starmaster.) There are a few more instances of "Dream Chaser" in this chapter also.		::In previous chapters it was "Dreamchaser," which I think works a little better. (Or at least it matches with Starmaster.) There are a few more instances of "Dream Chaser" in this chapter also.

	:“This is going to be tough. If they run, I’m a little '''too big to chase''',		:“This is going to be tough. If they run, I’m a little '''too big to chase''',

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	(Though I could do without the hanging at the end of the chapters. hehe.)		(Though I could do without the hanging at the end of the chapters. hehe.)
	[[User:VoyseyS\|VoyseyS]] ([[User talk:VoyseyS\|talk]]) 19:14, 18 September 2012 (UTC)		[[User:VoyseyS\|VoyseyS]] ([[User talk:VoyseyS\|talk]]) 19:14, 18 September 2012 (UTC)


			==Notes on the DC==

			:“I have been monitoring our ten '''‘Fortunatos’''' as closely as I might since the two cured RIDEs have returned to the camp, but I have not seen any unusual movements near them, nor detected unusual network traffic. Of course, whisker laser transmissions are very hard to detect.”
			::Wouldn't the infected RIDEs be the 'Montressors,' and their trapped humans the 'Fortunatos?'

			:The '''Dream Chaser''' had fore and aft retractable pulse cannons and two dozen of Kaylee’s favored micro-missiles in underwing FAST paks—the weapons were temporary, at least.
			::In ''Spaceflight of Fancy'' it was "Dreamchaser," which I think works a little better. (Or at least it matches with Starmaster.) There are a few more instances of "Dream Chaser" in this chapter also.

			:“This is going to be tough. If they run, I’m a little '''too big to chase''',
			::"Too big to ''give'' chase" would be clearer.

			:The problem with obvious places were rather self-evident, but it was just like her uncle. The problem was that if there was another Integrate aboard they could have done any number of things if they found the DIN.
			::Singular/plural disagreement in the first sentence. Also, two sentences in a row starting with "The problem" is a little awkward.

			:To her knowledge neither he nor his followers had ever killed another Intie.
			::Quinoa at least knows Fritz killed Paulie, if I remember correctly.

			:The sphinx started hyper-saturating her body with oxygen, topping off her batteries.
			::Inties can convert oxygen to electrical power? If so, why couldn't she have done that in the first place to get above 3% charge? (I totally could have missed something here.)

			:For convenience, the network had been arranged to have a 1:1 topology between the virtual and real worlds, which meant that the '''DINS''' in here would be in exactly the same places as outside.
			::DINs.

			:Rochelle reached out with a flood of DIN encrypted network probes masked as something from another '''Integrated'''.
			::Integrate.

			--[[User:Antimatter\|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter\|talk]]) 19:59, 29 February 2016 (CST)

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Ooohhh maannn! Why do these stories always end on these things called Cliffs? :D

I'm loving these stories Robotech, Jon and Jetfire.
(Though I could do without the hanging at the end of the chapters. hehe.)
[[User:VoyseyS|VoyseyS]] ([[User talk:VoyseyS|talk]]) 19:14, 18 September 2012 (UTC)