User:Robotech Master/All Nighter - Revision history

JonBuck at 02:08, 8 July 2014

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	'':Yeah, yeah. And you’re all ''in'' my head. It’s not like I have a choice, man. We don’t need meat and mech horning in on our beeswax.:''		'':Yeah, yeah. And you’re all ''in'' my head. It’s not like I have a choice, man. We don’t need meat and mech horning in on our beeswax.:''

	'':You think you can stop it like this? You might as well command the tide not to roll in. It’s gonna happen sooner or later no matter who you kill. This’ll bring your body count up to ~~322~~ of our fellow Inties.:''		'':You think you can stop it like this? You might as well command the tide not to roll in. It’s gonna happen sooner or later no matter who you kill. This’ll bring your body count up to 78 of our fellow Inties.:''

	Fritz growled. Jiminy knew how to provoke a guilt-trip these days, but today Fritz would have none of it. '':Shaddap, you pudknocker. I know what I’m doing.:''		Fritz growled. Jiminy knew how to provoke a guilt-trip these days, but today Fritz would have none of it. '':Shaddap, you pudknocker. I know what I’m doing.:''
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	It was more than enough to vaporize feathers, beak, and skull, the wall behind it, and everything for thirty meters beyond ''that'' in an expanding beam. The heat flash set the garden and house aflame, the shockwave sending any Intie nearby head over heels. On the cave ceiling overhead, the video display coating died, leaving only a little light from adjoining caverns. The sound of the blast thundered through the Enclave.		It was more than enough to vaporize feathers, beak, and skull, the wall behind it, and everything for thirty meters beyond ''that'' in an expanding beam. The heat flash set the garden and house aflame, the shockwave sending any Intie nearby head over heels. On the cave ceiling overhead, the video display coating died, leaving only a little light from adjoining caverns. The sound of the blast thundered through the Enclave.

	'':How much of Frank, his rider, and the rest of his squad were left when you killed them?:'' Fritz’s Jiminy asked. '':~~322~~ of your fellow Inties… should I number how many humans and RIDEs you’ve killed too?:''		'':How much of Frank, his rider, and the rest of his squad were left when you killed them?:'' Fritz’s Jiminy asked. '':78 of your fellow Inties… should I number how many humans and RIDEs you’ve killed too?:''

	'':Shut your yap!:'' Fritz snarled. He slipped back into realtime.		'':Shut your yap!:'' Fritz snarled. He slipped back into realtime.

JonBuck at 01:28, 8 July 2014

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	''July 12, 156 AL''		''July 12, 156 AL''

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	Fritz streaked through the turquoise sky, just under supersonic, far north from his current home, the Coffeehouse. Towers would always be full of nostalgia for him in the way the Coffeehouse couldn’t. ''When I first found that hidey-hole I was lucky to have a bed to sleep on,'' Fritz fondly reflected. It had taken months of nicking supplies to make the place even a little tolerable. It’d started with a self-fab quonset hut and as many other necessities he could pack in the back of a hacked Deuce. He’d been especially proud at acquiring the first polywell reactor to hardlight-seal off the cave and make it climate-controlled. It was thousands of klicks from Nextus and in the deepest, most inaccessible part of the Dry Ocean. The perfect pad for a hep cat on his own.		Fritz streaked through the turquoise sky, just under supersonic, far north from his current home, the Coffeehouse. Towers would always be full of nostalgia for him in the way the Coffeehouse couldn’t. ''When I first found that hidey-hole I was lucky to have a bed to sleep on,'' Fritz fondly reflected. It had taken months of nicking supplies to make the place even a little tolerable. It’d started with a self-fab quonset hut and as many other necessities he could pack in the back of a hacked Deuce. He’d been especially proud at acquiring the first polywell reactor to hardlight-seal off the cave and make it climate-controlled. It was thousands of klicks from Nextus and in the deepest, most inaccessible part of the Dry Ocean. The perfect pad for a hep cat on his own.

Robotech Master: fix link

2014-07-07T23:05:37Z

fix link

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	Speaking of dates, we realized that we hadn’t left quite enough time in the story to incorporate later events, and had to shove everything back a month or so—including the ending of “Deserted.” Whoops!		Speaking of dates, we realized that we hadn’t left quite enough time in the story to incorporate later events, and had to shove everything back a month or so—including the ending of “Deserted.” Whoops!

	The original version of this chapter is [[User:Robotech_Master/~~All_Nighter_dircut~~\|still available separately on Shifti]], if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!		The original version of this chapter is [[User:Robotech_Master/All_Nighter_original\|still available separately on Shifti]], if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!

	'''JonBuck:''' There are quite a few ideas in our original story concept that ended up not being used in the long run. At first, Fritz and Kaylee were the only two RIDEs in existence when the RIDE program started, and the Nextus-Sturmhaven War really didn’t figure that much into it. Fritz/Felix was still a “Jilted Lover”, though. So a lot of our revision process here is cleaning up the bits left over from these unused ideas.		'''JonBuck:''' There are quite a few ideas in our original story concept that ended up not being used in the long run. At first, Fritz and Kaylee were the only two RIDEs in existence when the RIDE program started, and the Nextus-Sturmhaven War really didn’t figure that much into it. Fritz/Felix was still a “Jilted Lover”, though. So a lot of our revision process here is cleaning up the bits left over from these unused ideas.

Robotech Master: link old version

2014-07-07T23:05:01Z

link old version

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	Speaking of dates, we realized that we hadn’t left quite enough time in the story to incorporate later events, and had to shove everything back a month or so—including the ending of “Deserted.” Whoops!		Speaking of dates, we realized that we hadn’t left quite enough time in the story to incorporate later events, and had to shove everything back a month or so—including the ending of “Deserted.” Whoops!

	The original version of this chapter is still available separately on Shifti, if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!		The original version of this chapter is [[User:Robotech_Master/All_Nighter_dircut\|still available separately on Shifti]], if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!

	'''JonBuck:''' There are quite a few ideas in our original story concept that ended up not being used in the long run. At first, Fritz and Kaylee were the only two RIDEs in existence when the RIDE program started, and the Nextus-Sturmhaven War really didn’t figure that much into it. Fritz/Felix was still a “Jilted Lover”, though. So a lot of our revision process here is cleaning up the bits left over from these unused ideas.		'''JonBuck:''' There are quite a few ideas in our original story concept that ended up not being used in the long run. At first, Fritz and Kaylee were the only two RIDEs in existence when the RIDE program started, and the Nextus-Sturmhaven War really didn’t figure that much into it. Fritz/Felix was still a “Jilted Lover”, though. So a lot of our revision process here is cleaning up the bits left over from these unused ideas.

Robotech Master at 22:10, 7 July 2014

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	I’m particularly proud of how I worked a reference to Machiavelli’s “better to be feared” philosophy into the Paulie scene, because it bookends nicely to when Zane brings it up later on in his final confrontation with Fritz. Going back through allows us to do things like that, since we know what we wrote down the road and can link back to it from the beginning and make it look like we knew what we were doing all along. (Oops, gave it away, didn’t I?) Which is why “real” authors go through several revisions before reaching a finished product, I suppose.		I’m particularly proud of how I worked a reference to Machiavelli’s “better to be feared” philosophy into the Paulie scene, because it bookends nicely to when Zane brings it up later on in his final confrontation with Fritz. Going back through allows us to do things like that, since we know what we wrote down the road and can link back to it from the beginning and make it look like we knew what we were doing all along. (Oops, gave it away, didn’t I?) Which is why “real” authors go through several revisions before reaching a finished product, I suppose.

	Speaking of dates, we realized that we hadn’t left quite enough time in the story to incorporate later events, and had to shove everything back a month or ~~so —including~~ the ending of “Deserted.” Whoops!		Speaking of dates, we realized that we hadn’t left quite enough time in the story to incorporate later events, and had to shove everything back a month or so—including the ending of “Deserted.” Whoops!

	The original version of this chapter is still available separately on Shifti, if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!		The original version of this chapter is still available separately on Shifti, if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!

Robotech Master at 22:09, 7 July 2014

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	''Now that’s over with, I think it’s time I did some research on a certain garage in Uplift,'' Fritz mused. ''See what kind of home my dear sweet Kaylee’s found herself…''		''Now that’s over with, I think it’s time I did some research on a certain garage in Uplift,'' Fritz mused. ''See what kind of home my dear sweet Kaylee’s found herself…''

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	'''R_M:''' The nice thing about going back through and revising these is that we get to harmonize what we wrote earlier with what came into our heads later. (Well, when I say “the nice thing,” I mean “the main reason we’re doing it.”)		'''R_M:''' The nice thing about going back through and revising these is that we get to harmonize what we wrote earlier with what came into our heads later. (Well, when I say “the nice thing,” I mean “the main reason we’re doing it.”)
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	The original version of this chapter is still available separately on Shifti, if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!		The original version of this chapter is still available separately on Shifti, if you want to compare. Likewise, you can do a history comparison to see exactly which bits of text changed. Hope you find it interesting!

	~~{{separator\|k}}~~

	'''JonBuck:''' There are quite a few ideas in our original story concept that ended up not being used in the long run. At first, Fritz and Kaylee were the only two RIDEs in existence when the RIDE program started, and the Nextus-Sturmhaven War really didn’t figure that much into it. Fritz/Felix was still a “Jilted Lover”, though. So a lot of our revision process here is cleaning up the bits left over from these unused ideas.		'''JonBuck:''' There are quite a few ideas in our original story concept that ended up not being used in the long run. At first, Fritz and Kaylee were the only two RIDEs in existence when the RIDE program started, and the Nextus-Sturmhaven War really didn’t figure that much into it. Fritz/Felix was still a “Jilted Lover”, though. So a lot of our revision process here is cleaning up the bits left over from these unused ideas.

Robotech Master: fixing dircut backlink

2014-07-07T22:04:27Z

fixing dircut backlink

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Robotech Master: Upgrading to Director's Cut edition

2014-07-07T22:03:11Z

Upgrading to Director's Cut edition

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JonBuck at 04:21, 1 August 2012

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Robotech Master: /* Part I: All-Nighter */ title

2012-08-01T03:40:21Z

Part I: All-Nighter: title

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