User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Outlines/All's Quiet on the Midwestern Front - Revision history

RandomDSdevel: /* Things To Incorporate Into the Story */ Fixed a small issue regarding grammatical style.

2015-11-18T21:02:50Z

Things To Incorporate Into the Story: Fixed a small issue regarding grammatical style.

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	* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)		* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)
	* The name 'Thunderblaze ARC (Advanced Research Cooperative), LLC' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig. {{note\|I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck? }}		* The name 'Thunderblaze ARC (Advanced Research Cooperative), LLC,' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig. {{note\|I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck? }}

RandomDSdevel: /* Things To Incorporate Into the Story */ Changed the parenthetical statement to a Template:note.

2015-11-18T20:45:11Z

Things To Incorporate Into the Story: Changed the parenthetical statement to a Template:note.

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	* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)		* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)
	* The name 'Thunderblaze ARC (Advanced Research Cooperative), LLC' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig (I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck?)		* The name 'Thunderblaze ARC (Advanced Research Cooperative), LLC' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig. {{note\|I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck? }}

RandomDSdevel: /* Things To Incorporate Into the Story */ Changed the possible name of the company which will hire either Carter or Craig.

2015-11-18T20:44:07Z

Things To Incorporate Into the Story: Changed the possible name of the company which will hire either Carter or Craig.

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	* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)		* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)
	* The name 'Thunderblaze ~~Innovations~~, LLC' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig (I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck?)		* The name 'Thunderblaze ARC (Advanced Research Cooperative), LLC' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig (I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck?)

RandomDSdevel: /* Things To Incorporate Into the Story */ Updated this section's bullet point concerning the company that hires Carter Hawkinson to reflect the fact that that company might also or might ''only'' hire Craig Simon.

2015-11-18T20:42:12Z

Things To Incorporate Into the Story: Updated this section's bullet point concerning the company that hires Carter Hawkinson to reflect the fact that that company might also or might ''only'' hire Craig Simon.

← Older revision		Revision as of 15:42, 18 November 2015
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	* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)		* The [http://www.lyrics.com/kokomo-lyrics-the-beach-boys.html lyrics] to the Beach Boys' song 'Kokomo' (probably as part of a clock's pre-set alarm.)
	* The name 'Thunderblaze Innovations, LLC' for the company that hires Carter (I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck?)		* The name 'Thunderblaze Innovations, LLC' for the company that hires either Carter or Craig (I may use the name if I ever start a technology company of my own, but, hey, ''FreeRIDErs'' is set in an alternate universe anyway, so what the heck?)

RandomDSdevel: /* Plot */ Reworked some plot details.

2015-11-18T20:39:16Z

Plot: Reworked some plot details.

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	(NOTE: The order of events in the final story has not yet been set in silicon!)		(NOTE: The order of events in the final story has not yet been set in silicon!)

	* Carter ~~finishes~~ his homework.		* Carter does some of his homework.
	* ~~Carter~~ leaves his ~~underground home~~ and ~~goes for a walk (possibly~~ with a dog of ~~bis? — I'm not exactly sure yet…)~~		* He remembers that he has some library books that are due.
	* ~~He ends up at~~ a ~~local hackerspace (possibly situated where the old YMCA building is now~~.
	* ~~Once at the hackerspace~~, he makes ~~some~~ modifications to the exoskeleton he uses to walk (he's paraplegic due to a [[wikipedia:Motor neuron disease\|motor neuron disease.)		* He leaves his house and walks to the library with Brisingr, his dog.
	* Someone at the hackrrspace asks Carter why he hasn't come to any of IUK's astronomy club's meetings in a while.		* After returning his books, Carter runs into his friend Craig on his way out of the library.
	** (The reason is that he heard that he was told that a friend of his who moved away died a while back during such a meeting and he's been rather busy since then, anyway. I'm not sure if Carter will voice the former reason at this point in the story, though.)		* Craig tells Carter that he wants to show him something in the part of the library that has been turned into a hackrrspace.
	* Carter finishes up his tinkering at the ~~hackerspace~~ and heads home.		* Craig shows Carter a wheelchair, explaining that he can use some of its motors to upgrade his prosthetic leg armor.
	* Somebody visiting from a local, but widely influential, technology company notices ~~his~~ skill and writes ~~him~~ down as a potential hire.		* Carter makes the necessary modifications to the exoskeleton he uses to walk (he's paraplegic due to a [[wikipedia:Motor neuron disease\|motor neuron disease.)
	** (Carter is later hired to work in an entry-level position ~~later~~, but I'm not sure exactly when…)		* Carter finishes up his tinkering at the hackrrspace and heads home.
			* Somebody visiting from a local, but widely influential, technology company notices either Carter's skill and/or Craig's and writes either one or both of them down as a potential hire.
			** (Carter is later hired to work in an entry-level position here, but I'm not sure exactly when…)
			* … (Other events to be decided upon later…)
	* The next day at school, someone invites Carter to a get-together of some sort. (He says he'll consider the offer and, sooner or later, decides to attend it when it inevitably occurs some time between the middle and the end of this story.)		* The next day at school, someone invites Carter to a get-together of some sort. (He says he'll consider the offer and, sooner or later, decides to attend it when it inevitably occurs some time between the middle and the end of this story.)
			* … (Other events to be decided upon later…)
	* When he gets home, he sees that his old friend's family is moving back into their old house.		* When he gets home, he sees that his old friend's family is moving back into their old house.
	* Strangely, they have a young woman with them.		** Strangely, they have a young woman with them.
	* Carter guesses (incorrectly) that she might be one of his friend's cousins or something.		** Carter guesses (incorrectly) that she might be one of his friend's cousins or something.
	* This individual and her family will take advantage of this assumption to help ease the girl, who is really Carter's ~~old friend~~, back into living in their old house.		** This individual and her family will take advantage of this assumption to help ease the girl, who is really an old friend of Carter's, back into living in their old house.
	* Carter starts picking up on some odd details about his new friend's behavior as he gets to know her and eventually figures out the truth.		* Carter starts picking up on some odd details about his 'new' friend's behavior as he gets to know her and eventually figures out the truth.
	* … (Other events to be decided upon ~~later.~~)		* … (Other events to be decided upon later…)
	* Carter's condition deteriorates.		* Carter's condition deteriorates.
	* The technology company that hired Carter earlier during the story offers to scan a copy of his genome and a complete map of his brain scanned into a computer server using the best technology they can come up with, some of which (an MRI powerful, precise, and accurate enough to show individual neurons in very fine detail) they were already developing as part of a contract with a medical institution.		* The technology company that hired either Carter and/or Craig earlier during the story offers to scan a copy of his genome and a complete map of his brain scanned into a computer server using the best technology they can come up with, some of which (an MRI powerful, precise, and accurate enough to show individual neurons in very fine detail) they were already developing as part of a contract with a medical institution.

	== Things To Incorporate Into the Story ==		== Things To Incorporate Into the Story ==

RandomDSdevel: Added a 'Plot' section.

2015-04-24T20:59:19Z

Added a 'Plot' section.

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 === Mentioned ===
-* [[User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Characters/Mariel Hawkinson|Mariel Hawkinson]]
+* [[User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Characters/Mariel Hawkinson|Mariel Hawkinson]] (Killed while on duty somewhere.)
 == Setting ==
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 ''Earth, <nowiki>'</nowiki>Sol<nowiki>'</nowiki> System''<br />
 [[FreeRIDErs (setting)|FreeRIDErs ''Universe'']]

RandomDSdevel: Started creating a character list.

2015-04-24T18:44:53Z

Started creating a character list.

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	{{WIP}}{{editing requested}}{{Critique requested}}{{Comment tag}}		{{WIP}}{{editing requested}}{{Critique requested}}{{Comment tag}}

			== Characters ==

			=== Primary ===

			* [[User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Characters/Dr. Richard G. Hawkinson, Ph. D.\|Dr. Richard G. Hawkinson, Ph. D.]]
			* [[User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Characters/Carter Hawkinson\|Carter Hawkinson]]
			* [[User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Characters/Jennifer Hawkinson\|Jennifer Hawkinson]]

			=== Mentioned ===

			* [[User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Characters/Mariel Hawkinson\|Mariel Hawkinson]]

	== Setting ==		== Setting ==

RandomDSdevel: RandomDSdevel moved page User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Outlines/Carter's Last Stand? to User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Outlines/All's Quiet on the Midwestern Front: The title of the story which this page outlines is...

2015-04-23T20:01:49Z

RandomDSdevel moved page User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Outlines/Carter's Last Stand? to User:RandomDSdevel/Sandbox/Works in Progress/Outlines/All's Quiet on the Midwestern Front: The title of the story which this page outlines is...

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RandomDSdevel: Created an outline for ''Carter's Last Stand?''.

2015-03-06T20:02:15Z

Created an outline for ''Carter's Last Stand?''.

New page

{{Universe|FreeRIDErs}}
{{WIP}}{{editing requested}}{{Critique requested}}{{Comment tag}}

== Setting ==

''Some time before the beginning of the post–Oil Age 'Dark Ages' in 2048 (Tentatively: Fall 2037 or 2047….)''<br />
''Kokomo, IN, USA''<br />
''Earth, <nowiki>'</nowiki>Sol<nowiki>'</nowiki> System''<br />
[[FreeRIDErs (setting)|FreeRIDErs ''Universe'']]