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	Jake flexed in front of the mirror and grinned. The brand-name snobs who paid five-figure price tags for a BodMod suit would choke if they knew how much money they were wasting. This back-alley knock-off had turned his pale, dumpy body into a chiseled masterpiece – at less than a quarter the cost. And this was a total package suit, not one of the basic models.		Jake flexed in front of the mirror and grinned. The brand-name snobs who paid five-figure price tags for a BodMod suit would choke if they knew how much money they were wasting. This back-alley knock-off had turned his pale, dumpy body into a chiseled masterpiece – at less than a quarter the cost. And this was a total package suit, not one of the basic models.

Bryan: noticed two typos while reading, hope you don't mind me fixing them

2007-08-05T00:13:55Z

noticed two typos while reading, hope you don't mind me fixing them

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	Feel pressure build quickly, he repeated the bray. This time the door was flung open and he cringed as the kid raised a fist to strike him.		Feel pressure build quickly, he repeated the bray. This time the door was flung open and he cringed as the kid raised a fist to strike him.

	“Hold it!” The imposter came in behind him. “He was quiet about it. He must want something.” Rodger glanced at the water and carrots, then smiled suddenly as he checked Jake. “OK. I see the problem.” Jake flushed, realizing why his need was so obvious. He hd started to drop like an animal.		“Hold it!” The imposter came in behind him. “He was quiet about it. He must want something.” Rodger glanced at the water and carrots, then smiled suddenly as he checked Jake. “OK. I see the problem.” Jake flushed, realizing why his need was so obvious. He had started to drop like an animal.

	Rodger squatted down next to him and sighed. “You’ve been pretty good so far. You’ll be in this room for at least another day or two. If you will stay quiet and cooperate, I’ll untie you so you can move around a little. Otherwise, we’ll leave you to lie in your own filth.”		Rodger squatted down next to him and sighed. “You’ve been pretty good so far. You’ll be in this room for at least another day or two. If you will stay quiet and cooperate, I’ll untie you so you can move around a little. Otherwise, we’ll leave you to lie in your own filth.”
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	It took longer than before for the nanites to work their miracles, but by the time Jake reached the barn his breathing had improved. He was brought up short by the strong stink of decay. Cindy had joined Oscar as a rotting corpse, both bodies disintegrating the same way the BodMod suit had. Breathing through his mouth, Jake headed for the side door – and discovered that it was shut.		It took longer than before for the nanites to work their miracles, but by the time Jake reached the barn his breathing had improved. He was brought up short by the strong stink of decay. Cindy had joined Oscar as a rotting corpse, both bodies disintegrating the same way the BodMod suit had. Breathing through his mouth, Jake headed for the side door – and discovered that it was shut.

	He brayed in frustration and turned to run back out the front, but Roger was already there. The man looked at the decaying remains of his former conspirators and smiled grimly. “That’s three. Now, where is ~~out~~ little dominatrix?” Jake backed away from the side entrance, revealing Ashland’s still form. “Good. Denise was obviously better with a knife than a van. Saves me the trouble of killing her myself. Which just leaves me with one problem.” His eyes narrowed. “You.”		He brayed in frustration and turned to run back out the front, but Roger was already there. The man looked at the decaying remains of his former conspirators and smiled grimly. “That’s three. Now, where is our little dominatrix?” Jake backed away from the side entrance, revealing Ashland’s still form. “Good. Denise was obviously better with a knife than a van. Saves me the trouble of killing her myself. Which just leaves me with one problem.” His eyes narrowed. “You.”

	Jake moved deeper into the stable, his mind racing. If he could make it to the office, maybe he could … what? The door was already weakened, and it was hardly bulletproof. He ended up against the training arena door, ears pinned back.		Jake moved deeper into the stable, his mind racing. If he could make it to the office, maybe he could … what? The door was already weakened, and it was hardly bulletproof. He ended up against the training arena door, ears pinned back.

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Posti: Jake got a 'deal' on his BodMod suit - and finds out that the price tag is a lot higher than expected.

2007-07-22T17:57:18Z

Jake got a 'deal' on his BodMod suit - and finds out that the price tag is a lot higher than expected.

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	Screaming in frustration, Jake stumbled for the door. His blood had turned to molten lava, and muscles were cramping so badly that he ended up falling sideways before he was halfway across the room. Unable to get up, he writhed in agony until his mind could take no more, and he fell into blissful oblivion.		Screaming in frustration, Jake stumbled for the door. His blood had turned to molten lava, and muscles were cramping so badly that he ended up falling sideways before he was halfway across the room. Unable to get up, he writhed in agony until his mind could take no more, and he fell into blissful oblivion.

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	“…verified. Thank you, Mr. Bradner. Your travel arrangements are complete. Will you be requiring a rental car in Australia?”		“…verified. Thank you, Mr. Bradner. Your travel arrangements are complete. Will you be requiring a rental car in Australia?”
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	The imposter shook his head. “Not hardly. He’ll stretch the session out as long as possible. Remember, he’s got a new toy to play with. And he thinks he has to put it away when he’s done.”		The imposter shook his head. “Not hardly. He’ll stretch the session out as long as possible. Remember, he’s got a new toy to play with. And he thinks he has to put it away when he’s done.”

	“Oh, yeah.” The Hispanic kid chuckled. “This is gonna be worth the price of admission.”		“Oh, yeah.” The Hispanic kid chuckled. “This is gonna be worth the price of admission.”

	“Stay out here and keep your ears open.” Roger looked back to where the training session could still be heard. “When you hear the main door sliding open, come back to the stall.” He turned to Denise. “You can help me check the setup. Come on.” The girl muttered something darkly, but followed the imposter out of Jake’s limited field of vision.		“Stay out here and keep your ears open.” Roger looked back to where the training session could still be heard. “When you hear the main door sliding open, come back to the stall.” He turned to Denise. “You can help me check the setup. Come on.” The girl muttered something darkly, but followed the imposter out of Jake’s limited field of vision.
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	Jake shivered, suddenly recognizing the voice of his former boss. Except that this must be Roger again. The imposter must have had another BodMod suit already prepared. That explained the setup he had Denise helping with – once he had the identification codes programmed in, all he had to do was shuck the Jake Bradner suit and step into Rupert Jonathan Deskins. From the bottom of the corporate ladder to the topmost rung in one easy step!		Jake shivered, suddenly recognizing the voice of his former boss. Except that this must be Roger again. The imposter must have had another BodMod suit already prepared. That explained the setup he had Denise helping with – once he had the identification codes programmed in, all he had to do was shuck the Jake Bradner suit and step into Rupert Jonathan Deskins. From the bottom of the corporate ladder to the topmost rung in one easy step!

	“You said I could have him!” The woman sounded angry. “That was part of the deal!”		“You said I could have him!” The woman sounded angry. “That was part of the deal!”

	“I said you could continue to take care of him.” It was strange to hear Deskin’s voice discussing his own fate. “I will maintain ownership of this property, and everything in it. Including Ardee, there.”		“I said you could continue to take care of him.” It was strange to hear Deskin’s voice discussing his own fate. “I will maintain ownership of this property, and everything in it. Including Ardee, there.”
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	“Cindy was supposed to clean everything up.” The kid sounded nervous. “Um, you told her to throw all that stuff out, remember?”		“Cindy was supposed to clean everything up.” The kid sounded nervous. “Um, you told her to throw all that stuff out, remember?”

	“Shit!” The gate rattled, apparently from a kick. “I haven’t got time for this. Call her. There’s a phone in the office. Tell her to find the damned activation code number. It will be on the inside cover of the manual, and on the Authenticity Certificate.”		“Shit!” The gate rattled, apparently from a kick. “I haven’t got time for this. Call her. There’s a phone in the office. Tell her to find the damned activation code number. It will be on the inside cover of the manual, and on the Authenticity Certificate.”

	After a few moments of silence, the imposter opened the gate again and looked in. He appeared calm, but the smile was gone. “OK. Listen up. Deskins has a regular board meeting in a few hours, and the prick is never, ever late. If I can’t get you done now, it will have to wait until tonight.”		After a few moments of silence, the imposter opened the gate again and looked in. He appeared calm, but the smile was gone. “OK. Listen up. Deskins has a regular board meeting in a few hours, and the prick is never, ever late. If I can’t get you done now, it will have to wait until tonight.”
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	There was mumbled agreement, and then the sound of a door creaking. However, neither accomplice spoke until the sound of tires crunching on gravel indicated that Roger had left.		There was mumbled agreement, and then the sound of a door creaking. However, neither accomplice spoke until the sound of tires crunching on gravel indicated that Roger had left.

	“Fuck cleanup!” Oscar sounded a lot braver with his boss gone. “I’m beat. He won’t be back until late this afternoon. I’m gonna take a nap.”		“Fuck cleanup!” Oscar sounded a lot braver with his boss gone. “I’m beat. He won’t be back until late this afternoon. I’m gonna take a nap.”

	Denise didn’t seem to object to the idea. “What about the freakshow?”		Denise didn’t seem to object to the idea. “What about the freakshow?”
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	Responding to the firm pressure, Jake found himself being posed with his face nearly up against the computer screen. He blinked as Ardee’s teeth let go, then realized that his right eye was directly in front of the ID scanner. A retinal scan! There was a flash of light from the scanner, followed by a double-beep from the computer. “ID scan accepted. Thank you. Please wait while your records are updated.” Ardee printed out this page as well.		Responding to the firm pressure, Jake found himself being posed with his face nearly up against the computer screen. He blinked as Ardee’s teeth let go, then realized that his right eye was directly in front of the ID scanner. A retinal scan! There was a flash of light from the scanner, followed by a double-beep from the computer. “ID scan accepted. Thank you. Please wait while your records are updated.” Ardee printed out this page as well.

	Jake’s eye was the lock for the bank account! Why hadn’t Ardee recorded his own pattern? Maybe the scanner would not recognize animal patterns. Although Jake’s eyes had been altered, they still retained most of their human appearance		Jake’s eye was the lock for the bank account! Why hadn’t Ardee recorded his own pattern? Maybe the scanner would not recognize animal patterns. Although Jake’s eyes had been altered, they still retained most of their human appearance

	“Shit! Get away from there!” Startled, Jake look back to see Denise lunging into the office with her switchblade out. She slashed at Deskin’s back end just as both hind hooves shot out. There was a spray of crimson and the crack of bones, with Deskins falling sideways into the desk and the psycho bitch flying backwards into the stable.		“Shit! Get away from there!” Startled, Jake look back to see Denise lunging into the office with her switchblade out. She slashed at Deskin’s back end just as both hind hooves shot out. There was a spray of crimson and the crack of bones, with Deskins falling sideways into the desk and the psycho bitch flying backwards into the stable.
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	Ashland’s hand shot out to the power bar, and the bank web site blinked off. “Nothing.”		Ashland’s hand shot out to the power bar, and the bank web site blinked off. “Nothing.”

	“Where is everybody?” Cindy frowned. And what are these two doing in here? Especially him!” The girl indicated Jake. “Why isn’t he a donkey now? I thought Roger was gonna use the scanner to get the code.”		“Where is everybody?” Cindy frowned. And what are these two doing in here? Especially him!” The girl indicated Jake. “Why isn’t he a donkey now? I thought Roger was gonna use the scanner to get the code.”

	“These two are mine, now. If I want to have them in my office, in my stable, or in my bed, it’s none of your business.”		“These two are mine, now. If I want to have them in my office, in my stable, or in my bed, it’s none of your business.”
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	Jake heard sirens approaching in the distance, and suddenly felt renewed fear. There was only one witness left who could communicate. The woman heard them too, sighing as she eased into a sitting position. “Well, shit.” She looked at him, hefted her pistol, then sighed and dropped it on the ground. “We need to talk.”		Jake heard sirens approaching in the distance, and suddenly felt renewed fear. There was only one witness left who could communicate. The woman heard them too, sighing as she eased into a sitting position. “Well, shit.” She looked at him, hefted her pistol, then sighed and dropped it on the ground. “We need to talk.”

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	The new stable wasn’t as big overall, but its individual accommodations would have rated five stars on the equine scale. Both Jake and Ardee had large, spacious stalls with openings to a fifty-acre pasture. Ironically, Jake’s was the one with a wide-screen Vid and customized computer system. The man who had paid for all of this seemed quite content with regular feeding and the attention of their ‘owner.’		The new stable wasn’t as big overall, but its individual accommodations would have rated five stars on the equine scale. Both Jake and Ardee had large, spacious stalls with openings to a fifty-acre pasture. Ironically, Jake’s was the one with a wide-screen Vid and customized computer system. The man who had paid for all of this seemed quite content with regular feeding and the attention of their ‘owner.’