Talk:Revenge - Revision history

Concerned Reader: explanation of where opening sentance came from.

2009-07-21T13:23:39Z

explanation of where opening sentance came from.

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	Yeah, the talk page on Rebuilding is getting ridiculously long, mainly because I ask ridiculous questions. Like how vampyres and symbiotes fit into the Pig and Whistle setting.</span> --[[User:Concerned Reader\|Concerned Reader]] 13:16, 21 July 2009 (UTC)		Yeah, the talk page on Rebuilding is getting ridiculously long, mainly because I ask ridiculous questions. Like how vampyres and symbiotes fit into the Pig and Whistle setting.</span> --[[User:Concerned Reader\|Concerned Reader]] 13:16, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

			<span style="color: #006400;">Oh yeah, the opening sentence I stole from when Guvnor of Space and I were having a Random Battle. Here: [[User_talk:Guvnor_Of_Space]]. I sit on phrases and scenes for a while until I can figure out how to use them, so some of them may be used in more than one place.</span> --[[User:Concerned Reader\|Concerned Reader]] 13:23, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

Concerned Reader: Party, like a rock star.

2009-07-21T13:16:16Z

Party, like a rock star.

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	PS I just didn't feel like commenting in your first story's talk page. Sorry. --[[User:WolfyDrake95\|Drake]] 06:34, 21 July 2009 (UTC)		PS I just didn't feel like commenting in your first story's talk page. Sorry. --[[User:WolfyDrake95\|Drake]] 06:34, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

			<span style="color: #006400;">Thanks for the kind words. I write these in open office really late at night, which means that I don't have a grammar check, or a brain check. <(o.0)>

			I'm pretty sure I wrote Rebuilding in present tense as well. I'm not sure why, maybe it makes it feel like it's happening right now? Either way, I think the main thing is to not change tenses partway through, which I might be guilty of in some parts of Rebuilding. I think ShadowWolf is going over Rebuilding as we speak, he had some life stuff to take care of first.

			Yeah, the talk page on Rebuilding is getting ridiculously long, mainly because I ask ridiculous questions. Like how vampyres and symbiotes fit into the Pig and Whistle setting.</span> --[[User:Concerned Reader\|Concerned Reader]] 13:16, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

WolfyDrake95: Yay for new story and stuff.

2009-07-21T06:34:00Z

Yay for new story and stuff.

New page

Ah, a sequel. In case you're wondering, I ''did'' enjoy the [[Rebuilding|first story]]. It was quite well written, but punctuation is something you'd want to look out for. I think you're thinking faster than you're typing, and so in an effort to keep up with your head, you miss punctuations and stuff. I can see a few errors in this new story as well.

Oh, and by the way, I'd like to point out something, since you've only just started this story: most stories are written in the past tense, not the present tense. Now I'm not sure how tense affects anything, but since this is only the early stages of this story, it's not too late to change. If you want to. Ask ShadowWolf for a proper critique if you need one: everyone expects the awesome ShadowWolf to critique us. Why? Because he's awesome. Go figure.

Anyway, all I'd like to say is that the first story was great, and I have high expectations for this one too. :)

PS I just didn't feel like commenting in your first story's talk page. Sorry. --[[User:WolfyDrake95|Drake]] 06:34, 21 July 2009 (UTC)