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Jonas: added the Batsignal; part of the reason Traxer let me post his stories here was to recieve feedback/critique

2011-01-14T14:44:50Z

added the Batsignal; part of the reason Traxer let me post his stories here was to recieve feedback/critique

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	Jacob walked into the bathroom breathing hard.		{{Critique requested}}Jacob walked into the bathroom breathing hard.

	He brought costumed paws to over-sized plastic eyes and leaned back against the sink. The paws sank, lingering on the sides of his muzzle, before they came down to his coat. He straightened out the baggy cloth, riddled with pockets and brass buttons, briefly took out a large novelty pocketwatch to check the time, and then patted down the chest fur that stuck out his unbuttoned front. Only then did he peak a look at the mirror behind him. He didn't have to flash a smile, it was already displayed in muzzle and foam teeth on the mask. The goggles, just big enough to cover the costume's eyes, were still there.		He brought costumed paws to over-sized plastic eyes and leaned back against the sink. The paws sank, lingering on the sides of his muzzle, before they came down to his coat. He straightened out the baggy cloth, riddled with pockets and brass buttons, briefly took out a large novelty pocketwatch to check the time, and then patted down the chest fur that stuck out his unbuttoned front. Only then did he peak a look at the mirror behind him. He didn't have to flash a smile, it was already displayed in muzzle and foam teeth on the mask. The goggles, just big enough to cover the costume's eyes, were still there.

Jonas at 18:05, 10 January 2011

2011-01-10T18:05:34Z

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	"And I kept my word."		"And I kept my word."

	"Brushing it off as an 'animal costume' is not going to cut it."		"Brushing it off as an 'animal costume' is not going to cut it."

	"Becca," Regi said, placing a paw over his fuzzy chest where he believed his heart was (was hard to tell with a longer body to deal with, "Trust me."		"Becca," Regi said, placing a paw over his fuzzy chest where he believed his heart was (was hard to tell with a longer body to deal with, "Trust me."
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	He pressed the button.		He pressed the button.
	[[Category:Story]] [[Category:Comedy]] [[Category:Anthropomorphic]] [[~~Categpry~~:Ferret]] [[Category:Mental change]]		[[Category:Story]] [[Category:Comedy]] [[Category:Anthropomorphic]] [[Category:Ferret]] [[Category:Mental change]]

Jonas at 01:43, 10 January 2011

2011-01-10T01:43:29Z

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	He pressed the button.		He pressed the button.
	[[Category:Story]] [[Category:Comedy]] [[Category:Anthropomorphic]] [[Categpry:Ferret]]		[[Category:Story]] [[Category:Comedy]] [[Category:Anthropomorphic]] [[Categpry:Ferret]] [[Category:Mental change]]

Jonas: New story! Not mine! Read it anyway! Wheee!

2011-01-10T01:42:45Z

New story! Not mine! Read it anyway! Wheee!