Nat and the Haemophiliacs - Revision history

Trismegistus Shandy: revise sequel linkage

2009-04-22T02:38:57Z

revise sequel linkage

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	~~This is the last in the series so far. I have a fourth story,~~ [[Nat and the Vigilante]]~~, of which I recently finished a first draft and will soon start the rewrite; I'll post it here when I finish it.~~		Sequel: [[Nat and the Vigilante]]

Trismegistus Shandy: fix various typos. minor revisions for consistency with fourth story, still in progress.

2008-07-25T14:11:29Z

fix various typos. minor revisions for consistency with fourth story, still in progress.

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	After examining and rejecting several artificial skin patches that		After examining and rejecting several artificial skin patches that
	~~aren~~'t quite the right color, Nat fixed the transponder to his belly,		weren't quite the right color, Nat fixed the transponder to his belly,
	left of his belly-button, thanked Metatech, and left.		left of his belly-button, thanked Metatech, and left.

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	"Well, we're working on that." He didn't tell her about the		"Well, we're working on that." He didn't tell her about the
	transponder, in case Tachyon is still nearby and listening.		transponder, in case Tachyon was still nearby and listening.

	On the way home he stopped at a drugstore and bought some hydrogen		On the way home he stopped at a drugstore and bought some hydrogen
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	Saturday if I don't have any cancellations that let me fit them in on		Saturday if I don't have any cancellations that let me fit them in on
	a weekday."		a weekday."

			"Um, on Saturdays they're usually with their father. Are you sure
			you can't do it on a weekday? I have them Sunday evening through
			Friday evening, generally."

			"...All right. Changing a couple of people after a full day of
			classes won't kill me. I can do them on a Tuesday or Thursday
			evening."

	"Thank you," she said. "I don't know what you said to Jack, but		"Thank you," she said. "I don't know what you said to Jack, but
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	"I hope he'll really give up on revenge," he said. "I don't seriously		"I hope he'll really give up on revenge," he said. "I don't seriously
	expect it, but I can hope for it... But even if his sentence this time		expect it, but I can hope for it... But even if his sentence this time
	isn't nearly as long as the last, he''ll have a lot of time to change		isn't nearly as long as the last, he'll have a lot of time to change
	his mind and decide my gift wasn't all that generous considering my		his mind and decide my gift wasn't all that generous considering my
	income and the subjective length of his imprisonment. And then there		income and the subjective length of his imprisonment. And then there
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	was told, "Ms. Voss called again. She said the boys are ready."		was told, "Ms. Voss called again. She said the boys are ready."

	"Good," Nat said, "...I guess. I hope they won't regret it. ~~Well,~~ I		"Good," Nat said, "...I guess. I hope they won't regret it. I said I
	~~originally told her I~~ would change them on a ~~Saturday, back when I was~~		would change them on a Tuesday or Thursday; can you come in on one of
	~~figuring~~ on ~~having the same school and work schedule for the rest~~ of		those days process them?"
	~~the semester, but I have Tuesdays free now, so let's plan on that.~~
	~~Can you come in next Tuesday to~~ process them?"

	"Sure."		"Sure."

	"Don't call Ms. Voss back yet; I need to make sure Zach is available		"OK, let's plan on next Tuesday. Don't call Ms. Voss back yet; I need
	that day too. And when you talk to her, check to make sure she has		to make sure Zach is available that day too. And when you talk to
	documentation proving she can make this decision for the boys without		her, check to make sure she has documentation proving she can make
	their father's involvement. Have her fax it to you, and then send		this decision for the boys without their father's involvement. Have
	copies to me and to Peter Flannery."		her fax it to you, and then send copies to me and to Peter Flannery."

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	"But I didn't know it was going to be like this!"		"But I didn't know it was going to be like this!"

	"You ~~din~~'t know because you didn't pay attention when Mom told you,		"You didn't know because you didn't pay attention when Mom told you,
	idiot."		idiot."

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	teleporter but you and him I would trust with my new identity and the		teleporter but you and him I would trust with my new identity and the
	location of my home. And if I hire somebody who can teleport people's		location of my home. And if I hire somebody who can teleport people's
	clothes, well, maybe ~~sombody~~ will bring along a pocket GPS receiver		clothes, well, maybe somebody will bring along a pocket GPS receiver
	and figure out where my house is. What, are you getting tired of the		and figure out where my house is. What, are you getting tired of the
	job already?"		job already?"
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	guarantees a speedy trial, doesn't it?"		guarantees a speedy trial, doesn't it?"

	"Perhaps the trial will be speedier of the defense rests its case		"Perhaps the trial will be speedier if the defense rests its case
	soon," the judge said.		soon," the judge said.

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	This is the last in the series so far. I have a fourth story ~~in progress that~~ I'll post here when~~/if~~ I finish it.		This is the last in the series so far. I have a fourth story, [[Nat and the Vigilante]], of which I recently finished a first draft and will soon start the rewrite; I'll post it here when I finish it.


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Trismegistus Shandy: typos

2008-07-09T13:51:18Z

typos

Trismegistus Shandy: fmt; minor correction

2008-07-09T13:47:14Z

fmt; minor correction

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	Quinlan's name:		Quinlan's name:

	Husband/father? Alive, married, divorced? His permission		: Husband/father? Alive, married, divorced? His permission needed?
	needed?

	What do the boys think of it? Refuse if they don't like it?		: What do the boys think of it? Refuse if they don't like it? Or do it on their mother and doctor's say-so for their own good?
	Or do it on their mother and doctor's say-so for their own good?

	Can I cover my ass so the boys can't sue me if they still hate		: Can I cover my ass so the boys can't sue me if they still hate being girls when they turn eighteen?
	being girls when they turn eighteen?

	Has Ms. Quinlan been spreading my name far and wide? Am I		: Has Ms. Quinlan been spreading my name far and wide? Am I going to get lots of these cases?
	going to get lots of these cases?

	He clipped the note to the Voss boys' file, which Melanie had left on		He clipped the note to the Voss boys' file, which Melanie had left on
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	After some brief further discussion, they hung up. Nat set out the Go		After some brief further discussion, they hung up. Nat set out the Go
	board and placed a ~~white~~ stone.		board and placed a black stone.

	"Your move," she said to Zach.		"Your move," she said to Zach.

Trismegistus Shandy: formatting

2008-07-09T13:40:55Z

formatting

Trismegistus Shandy: formatting

2008-06-30T18:21:05Z

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+{{byline|author=Trismegistus Shandy
-Nat and the Haemophiliacs
+|user=Trismegistus Shandy}}
 Sequel to [[Unpresentable Heroes]] and [[Nat and the Telepath]]
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 "Your move," she said to Zach.

Trismegistus Shandy: formatting

2008-06-30T18:12:51Z

formatting

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	Nat and the Haemophiliacs		Nat and the Haemophiliacs
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	ransom-note style:		ransom-note style:

	"more humiliation. To follow"		:"more humiliation. '''To''' ''follow''"

	Thursday afternoon he left school after his last class, drove home,		Thursday afternoon he left school after his last class, drove home,
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	it and you want to stick with it, but what if your Mom or Dad had told		it and you want to stick with it, but what if your Mom or Dad had told
	you when you were six or eight years old that they were going to have		you when you were six or eight years old that they were going to have
	you changed into a girl to cure your haemophilia? No appeal; fiat		you changed into a girl to cure your haemophilia? No appeal; ''fiat
	puella."		puella''."

	"I'm ambivalent," Rae Nan said after a period of staring unseeingly at		"I'm ambivalent," Rae Nan said after a period of staring unseeingly at
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	mail, and another cut and pasted note:		mail, and another cut and pasted note:

	"tell me Where? I can find the people. who arrested ~~Me else~~ worse		:"tell me '''Where?''' I can ''find'' the people. who arrested '''me''' Else worse things happen"
	things happen"

	Another dog-walker looked oddly at Nat pulling the bundle of underwear		Another dog-walker looked oddly at Nat pulling the bundle of underwear
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	to pull the pants-around-the-ankles trick again.		to pull the pants-around-the-ankles trick again.

	"Slow down and talk to me at 8:00 pm tonight or 8:00 am tomorrow,		: "Slow down and talk to me at 8:00 pm tonight or 8:00 am tomorrow, at home. I'll try to get rid of the bodygard so I can talk to you. Promise to leave me alone and I'll tell you where to find the people who arrested you."
	at home. I'll try to get rid of the bodygard so I can talk to
	you. Promise to leave me alone and I'll tell you where to find
	the people who arrested you."

	That evening after his last client left, Nat stayed a few minutes,		That evening after his last client left, Nat stayed a few minutes,

Trismegistus Shandy: story, first posted on tg_fiction mailing list in June 2008

2008-06-30T18:07:36Z

story, first posted on tg_fiction mailing list in June 2008

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	don't want to teleport naked with a naked stranger, even if it does		don't want to teleport naked with a naked stranger, even if it does
	save them a lot of hours waiting in security checkpoint lines and		save them a lot of hours waiting in security checkpoint lines and
	sitting in a cramped planes."		sitting in cramped planes."

	"You're probably better off keeping it secret as long as you can," Nat		"You're probably better off keeping it secret as long as you can," Nat
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	"So I made the appointment with you, and I told my doctor about it at		"So I made the appointment with you, and I told my doctor about it at
	my last appointment with him before then. He kind of grunted		my last appointment with him before then. He kind of grunted
	noncommitally the way ~~the~~ does and said, 'We'll see.' And then you		noncommitally the way he does and said, 'We'll see.' And then you
	changed me -- oh, God, it was so weird at first. It still feels that		changed me -- oh, God, it was so weird at first. It still feels that
	weird some mornings. I got my sister to teach me about women's		weird some mornings. I got my sister to teach me about women's
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	into one of two categories: transsexuals and curiosity-seekers.		into one of two categories: transsexuals and curiosity-seekers.
	Nearly all of the latter started out by making two appointments, a few		Nearly all of the latter started out by making two appointments, a few
	days or weeks apart, and they almost never ~~cancelled~~ the second		days or weeks apart, and they almost never canceled the second
	appointment; most of those who didn't start out with two appointments		appointment; most of those who didn't start out with two appointments
	made a second one pretty soon after he changed them. As far as he		made a second one pretty soon after he changed them. As far as he

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	"Pretty much," she said. "I didn't want to be female per se, but I		"Pretty much," she said. "I didn't want to be female per se, but I
	thought I could stand it, and I wanted to find out, at least, what it		thought I could stand it, and I wanted to find out, at least, what it
	was like not to have to be so damn careful all the time. Periods		was like not to have to be so damn ''careful'' all the time. Periods
	suck, but they're no worse than the bruises I used to get all the		suck, but they're no worse than the bruises I used to get all the
	time, and I like rock climbing and skateboarding and several other		time, and I like rock climbing and skateboarding and several other
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	pursued him. He didn't get far; Nat saw him sprawled in the parking		pursued him. He didn't get far; Nat saw him sprawled in the parking
	lot across the street, at the same instant as he felt a rough handling		lot across the street, at the same instant as he felt a rough handling
	all over. He still couldn't actually see Tachyon, but the moment he		all over. He still couldn't actually ''see'' Tachyon, but the moment he
	felt the tugging he exercised his power.		felt the tugging he exercised his power.

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	more than one or two readings, which was most of them. After that		more than one or two readings, which was most of them. After that
	happened a few times they quit letting me check out books entirely.		happened a few times they quit letting me check out books entirely.
	And I was there for more than a thousand years. You have no idea		And I was there for more than a thousand years. You have no ''idea''
	how much I want to make them suffer the same way. It's impossible, of		how much I want to make them suffer the same way. It's impossible, of
	course, except maybe with Captain Rapid, but I'll do as much as I can.		course, except maybe with Captain Rapid, but I'll do as much as I can.
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	measure exactly how fast time is flowing for me, because my power		measure exactly how fast time is flowing for me, because my power
	doesn't affect clocks or watches no matter how close they get to me,		doesn't affect clocks or watches no matter how close they get to me,
	but I've counted my periods since they arrested me: forty-one.		but I've counted my periods since they arrested me: ''forty-one''.
	Three of them before these ever-so-well-organized jailers found me any		Three of them before these ever-so-well-organized jailers found me any
	tampons. It's been over three years. It's not fun, but I've gotten		tampons. It's been over three years. It's not fun, but I've gotten