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	Her mind was hazy as they traveled through the water, her grip loosening before reality took hold of her again and she tightened her grip again. The air was a welcome relief to her aching lungs.		Her mind was hazy as they traveled through the water, her grip loosening before reality took hold of her again and she tightened her grip again. The air was a welcome relief to her aching lungs.

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	"Will you at least...help me." He struggled the words out. Then collapsed into a sitting position.		"Will you at least...help me." He struggled the words out. Then collapsed into a sitting position.
	She arched an eyebrow at him, and brought herself to stand normally. “…With what?” She asked, bending down in front of him.		She arched an eyebrow at him, and brought herself to stand normally. “…With what?” She asked, bending down in front of him.

	"With this," he said. His face suddenly contorted in pain. His frame became smaller in an instant, his legs thinned spreading three toed feet. His head shifted outward, his eyes moving to the sides of his head and a beak forming in place of a mouth and nose. His body sprouted black feathers, but after a moment they fell out and white feathers grew in.		"With this," he said. His face suddenly contorted in pain. His frame became smaller in an instant, his legs thinned spreading three toed feet. His head shifted outward, his eyes moving to the sides of his head and a beak forming in place of a mouth and nose. His body sprouted black feathers, but after a moment they fell out and white feathers grew in.
	He had become a white raven.		He had become a white raven.

	She blinked a few times as she examined him. “You’re just like me.” She muttered in disbelief. She offered her hand for him to perch upon as she let herself fall to her knees to sit comfortably.		She blinked a few times as she examined him. “You’re just like me.” She muttered in disbelief. She offered her hand for him to perch upon as she let herself fall to her knees to sit comfortably.

	The raven jumped onto her finger. He quickly climbed up her arm onto her shoulder. He snuck behind her neck to her other shoulder. Brushing her neck as he did so.		The raven jumped onto her finger. He quickly climbed up her arm onto her shoulder. He snuck behind her neck to her other shoulder. Brushing her neck as he did so.

	The feathers rushing past her neck tickled, and she giggled softly, something she had done rarely since some time ago. She glanced up at him on her shoulder, admiring his soft white feathers with a small smile creasing her lips.		The feathers rushing past her neck tickled, and she giggled softly, something she had done rarely since some time ago. She glanced up at him on her shoulder, admiring his soft white feathers with a small smile creasing her lips.

	He cocked his head at her, somehow managing to smile even with a beak. His amused expression was comical yet somehow fitting.		He cocked his head at her, somehow managing to smile even with a beak. His amused expression was comical yet somehow fitting.

	“Hehe.” She sat back, pulling her knees to her chest and hugging them. “I haven’t laughed in so long; I had forgotten how good it felt.” She said softly, bringing her gaze back to the ground in front of her.		“Hehe.” She sat back, pulling her knees to her chest and hugging them. “I haven’t laughed in so long; I had forgotten how good it felt.” She said softly, bringing her gaze back to the ground in front of her.

	He sat there, a slightly calm expression on his face. His eyes closed and a familiar sound could be heard.		He sat there, a slightly calm expression on his face. His eyes closed and a familiar sound could be heard.

	She tilted her head and closed her eyes to listen. The melody calmed her, slowing her tears a little. She gently wiped them away as the flow continued to slow.		She tilted her head and closed her eyes to listen. The melody calmed her, slowing her tears a little. She gently wiped them away as the flow continued to slow.

	After a minute of this he suddenly jumped off of her shoulder. There was a thud as he hit the ground in human form again.		After a minute of this he suddenly jumped off of her shoulder. There was a thud as he hit the ground in human form again.

	She opened her eyes and stood up again, dusting off her beloved trench coat with care. She turned to look at him again and took a breath before speaking. “You are very different from them…thank you.” She said, a smile gradually crossing her face. “I’m afraid I shall be going now.” She bowed slightly and waited for his response.		She opened her eyes and stood up again, dusting off her beloved trench coat with care. She turned to look at him again and took a breath before speaking. “You are very different from them…thank you.” She said, a smile gradually crossing her face. “I’m afraid I shall be going now.” She bowed slightly and waited for his response.

	He nodded slightly tears in his eyes.		He nodded slightly tears in his eyes.
	"Can I...call you?"		"Can I...call you?"

	She paused for a moment, thinking it over. “Um, sure.” She said, pulling a slip of paper and a small pencil from her pocket. “I might not be there much longer though…” She whispered as she wrote a number down and presented the slip to him.		She paused for a moment, thinking it over. “Um, sure.” She said, pulling a slip of paper and a small pencil from her pocket. “I might not be there much longer though…” She whispered as she wrote a number down and presented the slip to him.

	He took the slip. "Don't worry. I'm sure I can find you." He extended his hand as if to shake.		He took the slip. "Don't worry. I'm sure I can find you." He extended his hand as if to shake.
	“Not what I meant, but okay.” She said, extending her hand as well and gently taking his to shake it.		“Not what I meant, but okay.” She said, extending her hand as well and gently taking his to shake it.

	He didn't shake, but merely threw his other arm around her to hug her. Before she could respond he changed and disappeared. His white form grew smaller in the sky for a minute and then was hidden by a tree. For just a second a shrill whistle could be heard across the park. Then all was still. Two feathers sat on the ground under the tree. Each was pure white.		He didn't shake, but merely threw his other arm around her to hug her. Before she could respond he changed and disappeared. His white form grew smaller in the sky for a minute and then was hidden by a tree. For just a second a shrill whistle could be heard across the park. Then all was still. Two feathers sat on the ground under the tree. Each was pure white.
	All the black feathers that had fallen out had mysteriously disappeared.		All the black feathers that had fallen out had mysteriously disappeared.

	She stood frozen after the short embrace, her body twitching a little. It was a little weird to her…that a complete stranger would suddenly take interest in her, let alone hug her. She wrapped her arms around herself, staring up to where he had flew off, then turned and quietly took her leave. “It’s nothing…He wouldn’t care…”		She stood frozen after the short embrace, her body twitching a little. It was a little weird to her…that a complete stranger would suddenly take interest in her, let alone hug her. She wrapped her arms around herself, staring up to where he had flew off, then turned and quietly took her leave. “It’s nothing…He wouldn’t care…”

	She murmured the last part to herself as another tear slipped down her cheek.		She murmured the last part to herself as another tear slipped down her cheek.



	There was a fluttering of wings as a large black bird swooped low across the city. It flew into the park alighting in a tree.		There was a fluttering of wings as a large black bird swooped low across the city. It flew into the park alighting in a tree.
	A strange melody could be heard for a mere second and then the bird took off again. It swooped low through the streets it's head turning this way and that. It's eyelids were shut tightly and it almost hit a few things. It came to a short street about a block from the park.		A strange melody could be heard for a mere second and then the bird took off again. It swooped low through the streets it's head turning this way and that. It's eyelids were shut tightly and it almost hit a few things. It came to a short street about a block from the park.
	It turned down the street. swiftly flying from one mail box to another. when it got about halfway down it stopped and circled the house.		It turned down the street. swiftly flying from one mail box to another. when it got about halfway down it stopped and circled the house.
	After a few moments it settled on a window sill and banged on the glass attempting to wake the figure inside.		After a few moments it settled on a window sill and banged on the glass attempting to wake the figure inside.

	Rena sat half asleep in her room, sitting on her bed while leaning against a wall. She held a knife gently in her hands, drawing her fingers lightly over the sharp end of the blade, staring at it her eyes half open. The world seemed mute to her as her only concern was the blade in her hands and the conflicting thoughts that raged within her mind.		Rena sat half asleep in her room, sitting on her bed while leaning against a wall. She held a knife gently in her hands, drawing her fingers lightly over the sharp end of the blade, staring at it her eyes half open. The world seemed mute to her as her only concern was the blade in her hands and the conflicting thoughts that raged within her mind.
	One of the thoughts being of the stranger she had met earlier. She frowned a little and continued playing with the blade.		One of the thoughts being of the stranger she had met earlier. She frowned a little and continued playing with the blade.

	The bird seemed to slowly notice that the figure was moving and banged on the glass of the window a little bit harder.		The bird seemed to slowly notice that the figure was moving and banged on the glass of the window a little bit harder.

	She glanced up at the window, looking rather irritated. She set her tool down on the bed and stood up, walking quietly to the glass. She pushed one side open and took a seat back down on the bed, watching the large black bird in an annoyed way.		She glanced up at the window, looking rather irritated. She set her tool down on the bed and stood up, walking quietly to the glass. She pushed one side open and took a seat back down on the bed, watching the large black bird in an annoyed way.

	The bird tapped the window once more. There was a scrap of paper in it's talon and it looked at it almost as if reading the writing that was on it.		The bird tapped the window once more. There was a scrap of paper in it's talon and it looked at it almost as if reading the writing that was on it.

	She arched an eyebrow at it, but began to fall back into her former mood. She crawled back across the bed, taking a seat and picking the knife up again. This time as she brought her fingers over it, traces of blood were felt dripping down the shiny blade.		She arched an eyebrow at it, but began to fall back into her former mood. She crawled back across the bed, taking a seat and picking the knife up again. This time as she brought her fingers over it, traces of blood were felt dripping down the shiny blade.

	The bird got a frightened look in it's eyes. It pounded on the glass with it's beak and head so loudly that it could be heard across the street. A light turned on in one of the house's other rooms...		The bird got a frightened look in it's eyes. It pounded on the glass with it's beak and head so loudly that it could be heard across the street. A light turned on in one of the house's other rooms...

	Hearing footsteps down the hallway she quickly slipped the blade under her mattress and laid back down, concealing her bleeding hand beneath a pillow. She set her head down and closed her eyes, slowing her breathing to make it appear that she had been asleep.		Hearing footsteps down the hallway she quickly slipped the blade under her mattress and laid back down, concealing her bleeding hand beneath a pillow. She set her head down and closed her eyes, slowing her breathing to make it appear that she had been asleep.

	The bird jumped away from the window and fluttered to the roof.		The bird jumped away from the window and fluttered to the roof.
	Foot steps came down the hall and one of Rena's parents looked in. Seeing nothing out of the ordinary the light was quickly turned off, and everyone else was back asleep in minutes.		Foot steps came down the hall and one of Rena's parents looked in. Seeing nothing out of the ordinary the light was quickly turned off, and everyone else was back asleep in minutes.

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	She jumped to her feet, spinning around to face who ever had spoken. She took a step back, hugging herself nervously. “…Hello…” She murmured, keeping her head low so that he couldn’t see her face well.		She jumped to her feet, spinning around to face who ever had spoken. She took a step back, hugging herself nervously. “…Hello…” She murmured, keeping her head low so that he couldn’t see her face well.

	He jumped down from the branch that he had been standing on. "Sorry to scare you," he said, "you looked a little lonely, are you okay?" He came a little closer.		He jumped down from the branch that he had been standing on. "Sorry to scare you," he said, "you looked a little lonely, are you okay?" He came a little closer.

	She looked up a little, stepping back again. "It's okay." She said quickly, "Um, I'm fine..." She added, rubbing her face to hide the tears, but she was a terrible liar, and she knew it.		She looked up a little, stepping back again. "It's okay." She said quickly, "Um, I'm fine..." She added, rubbing her face to hide the tears, but she was a terrible liar, and she knew it.

	He took a few steps forward. "I've already seen your face if you're worried about that. And you don't seem so fine to me," he smiled kindly.		He took a few steps forward. "I've already seen your face if you're worried about that. And you don't seem so fine to me," he smiled kindly.

	She hesitantly lowered her hands to her sides, letting her head droop and her eyes rest on the ground by her feet. “…Why do you care?” She asked defensively, letting another tear slip down her cheek.		She hesitantly lowered her hands to her sides, letting her head droop and her eyes rest on the ground by her feet. “…Why do you care?” She asked defensively, letting another tear slip down her cheek.

	He shrugged, "I can kind of sense other people's feelings and I've always felt like I should do something about it." He paused for a moment. "Although...."		He shrugged, "I can kind of sense other people's feelings and I've always felt like I should do something about it." He paused for a moment. "Although...."

	She glanced up again, waiting for him to continue. As she did another gust of wind blew past, blowing her hair away from her face and pushing the trench open a little to reveal her features better. She quickly closed it back up, hugging herself again to keep it together.		She glanced up again, waiting for him to continue. As she did another gust of wind blew past, blowing her hair away from her face and pushing the trench open a little to reveal her features better. She quickly closed it back up, hugging herself again to keep it together.

	"Well, let's just say that I didn't need any help finding out that you had a problem.		"Well, let's just say that I didn't need any help finding out that you had a problem.

	“No kidding…” She murmured, taking another step back. “…but I’m afraid there’s nothing you can do to help me.”		“No kidding…” She murmured, taking another step back. “…but I’m afraid there’s nothing you can do to help me.”

	"Oh, really?" he asked. He came up next to her. "Are you sure?"		"Oh, really?" he asked. He came up next to her. "Are you sure?"

	"No one can..." She whispered, hugging herself tighter.		"No one can..." She whispered, hugging herself tighter.

	"Do you want to talk about it?" he gently touched her arm.		"Do you want to talk about it?" he gently touched her arm.

	She jumped at his touch and pulled away. “No, thank you, but no…” Her voice trailed off a bit as she stared at him, examining his expression. “…You’re not like the others…” She muttered, standing perfectly still.		She jumped at his touch and pulled away. “No, thank you, but no…” Her voice trailed off a bit as she stared at him, examining his expression. “…You’re not like the others…” She muttered, standing perfectly still.

	He cautiously approached her again.		He cautiously approached her again.
	"What others?" He asked in a tone that was genuinely concerned.		"What others?" He asked in a tone that was genuinely concerned.

	She stopped herself there and bit her lower lip. She looked away rather embarrassed. “Um…please excuse me. I’ve said too much.” She said, turning to leave.		She stopped herself there and bit her lower lip. She looked away rather embarrassed. “Um…please excuse me. I’ve said too much.” She said, turning to leave.

	"But," He reached out his hand after her, as if to place it on her shoulder.		"But," He reached out his hand after her, as if to place it on her shoulder.
	If she stayed he could bring her close to him. Hug her and drain her fears and sorrows from her body. He could stand beside her and protect her. But he couldn't reach her.		If she stayed he could bring her close to him. Hug her and drain her fears and sorrows from her body. He could stand beside her and protect her. But he couldn't reach her.

	For whatever reason, at the word, her body froze. She couldn’t move, she stood almost mid step a foot away from him. She glanced over her shoulder at him, eyeing him curiously, as if waiting for him to continue.		For whatever reason, at the word, her body froze. She couldn’t move, she stood almost mid step a foot away from him. She glanced over her shoulder at him, eyeing him curiously, as if waiting for him to continue.

	"Will you at least...help me." He struggled the words out. Then collapsed into a sitting position.		"Will you at least...help me." He struggled the words out. Then collapsed into a sitting position.
	She arched an eyebrow at him, and brought herself to stand normally. “…With what?” She asked, bending down in front of him.		She arched an eyebrow at him, and brought herself to stand normally. “…With what?” She asked, bending down in front of him.

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	She glanced behind her as the boy left, watching him trip over himself. She had stopped walking for a moment, but a concerning thought made her continue her move. She brought her head back and continued on, ignoring her surroundings the best she could.		She glanced behind her as the boy left, watching him trip over himself. She had stopped walking for a moment, but a concerning thought made her continue her move. She brought her head back and continued on, ignoring her surroundings the best she could.

	The boy moved off the path quietly crossing back to follow her. He was surprisingly silent and kept out of her gaze quite well.		The boy moved off the path quietly crossing back to follow her. He was surprisingly silent and kept out of her gaze quite well.
	He lost sight of her once, but closed his eyes, hummed and was following her again.		He lost sight of her once, but closed his eyes, hummed and was following her again.

	She had thought she had heard the humming again, but ignored the feeling and pressed on. It wasn’t long until she arrived at the opposite end of the park, which was just as deserted. It was also encased in forestry, which helped to block the wind. She sat down under a large tree, facing away from the wind, and pulled her trench closed around her.		She had thought she had heard the humming again, but ignored the feeling and pressed on. It wasn’t long until she arrived at the opposite end of the park, which was just as deserted. It was also encased in forestry, which helped to block the wind. She sat down under a large tree, facing away from the wind, and pulled her trench closed around her.
	The boy, was still in pursuit, but now faced a problem. He wanted to approach her. He cautiously climbed the tree from the side facing away from her. He slipped once the branches creaking, but hid himself quickly from sight. Still watching her he settled in to wait and think of a way to ~~intro duce~~ himself.
			The boy, was still in pursuit, but now faced a problem. He wanted to approach her. He cautiously climbed the tree from the side facing away from her. He slipped once the branches creaking, but hid himself quickly from sight. Still watching her he settled in to wait and think of a way to introduce himself.

	Her head shot up, for the first time completely revealing her face. She looked around suspiciously, then brought her attention to the tree she was sitting under. She scanned the branches carefully, and though she saw nothing, she became very uncomfortable. She hugged her knees and rested her head upon them, shivering again, but more from her paranoia that the cold.		Her head shot up, for the first time completely revealing her face. She looked around suspiciously, then brought her attention to the tree she was sitting under. She scanned the branches carefully, and though she saw nothing, she became very uncomfortable. She hugged her knees and rested her head upon them, shivering again, but more from her paranoia that the cold.

	A white raven sat in the tree watching. The boy was nowhere in sight. The bird swooped down to a lower branch making a harsh cawing sound.		A white raven sat in the tree watching. The boy was nowhere in sight. The bird swooped down to a lower branch making a harsh cawing sound.
	She relaxed a little, telling herself that it was only the raven that was making the suspicious noises. Her tail thumped boredly on the ground beside her, occasionally curling in around her to help keep her warm.		She relaxed a little, telling herself that it was only the raven that was making the suspicious noises. Her tail thumped boredly on the ground beside her, occasionally curling in around her to help keep her warm.

	The raven landed on a low branch of the tree. It cocked it's head slightly.		The raven landed on a low branch of the tree. It cocked it's head slightly.
	"Hello," the boy said.		"Hello," the boy said.

	She jumped to her feet, spinning around to face who ever had spoken. She took a step back, hugging herself nervously. “…Hello…” She murmured, keeping her head low so that he couldn’t see her face well.		She jumped to her feet, spinning around to face who ever had spoken. She took a step back, hugging herself nervously. “…Hello…” She murmured, keeping her head low so that he couldn’t see her face well.
	He jumped down from the branch that he had been standing on. "Sorry to scare you," he said, "you looked a little lonely, are you okay?" He came a little closer.		He jumped down from the branch that he had been standing on. "Sorry to scare you," he said, "you looked a little lonely, are you okay?" He came a little closer.