Shifti - User contributions [en]

FreeRIDErs (publication order)

2016-06-01T04:13:23Z

Antimatter: /* 2016 */ Adding a missing tag.

This is the publication order of the "main" stories in the FreeRIDErs universe. Feel free to add your story here once it's published.

==2012==
07/22/12 [[User:Robotech_Master/Deserted|Deserted]], [[User:Robotech_Master/Merging_Traffic|Merging Traffic]], [[User:Robotech_Master/FreeRIDErs_dircut|FreeRIDErs]] 
07/25/12 [[User:Robotech_Master/All Nighter|Integration Part 1: All Nighter]] 
07/29/12 [[User:Robotech_Master/Integrates|Integration Part 2: Integrates]] 
07/31/12 [[User:Robotech Master/RIDEgirls Day Out|Integration Part 3: RIDEgirls' Day Out]] 
08/05/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Dating Games|Integration Part 4: Dating Games]] 
08/08/12 [[User:Robotech Master/N00bs|Integration Part 5: N00bs]] 
08/11/12 [[User:Robotech Master/All Aboard|Integration Part 6: All Aboard!]] 
08/12/12 [[User:Robotech Master/A Meating of the Board|Integration Part 7: A Meating of the Board]] 
08/16/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Meat the Press|Integration Part 8: Meat, the Press]] 
08/16/12 [[User:Jetfire/Aloha|Aloha]] 
08/19/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Stockholm Vacation|Integration Part 9: Stockholm Vacation]] 
08/22/12 [[User:Jetfire/Splashdown|Splashdown]] 
08/22/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Spaceflight of Fancy|Integration Part 10: Spaceflight of Fancy]] 
08/24/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Rochelle Rufia|Rochelle & Rufia: R&R]] 
08/26/12 [[User:Robotech_Master/Slightly Foxed|Barely Fused, Slightly Foxed]] 
08/27/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Citizen Katie|Integration Part 11: Citizen Katie]] 
08/31/12 [[Turnover]] 
09/01/12 [[User:Robotech Master/The Crew|Integration Part 12: The Crew]] 
09/02/12 [[User:Jetfire/Astra-naught|Astra-naught]] 
09/08/12 [[Inspecteur Hollins and The Cat's Paw]] 
09/08/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Kaylee Anny|Integration Part 13: Kaylee & Anny]] 
09/14/12 [[Inspecteur Hollins and The Viral Thief]] 
09/16/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Assault Batteries|Integration Part 14: Assault and Batteries]] 
09/17/12 [[User:Jetfire/The_Lady_of_the_Tiger|The Lady of the Tiger]] 
09/22/12 [[Inspecteur Hollins and The Multimillion Vault]] 
10/04/12 [[User:Jetfire/Cave_of_Wonders|Cave of Wonders]] 
10/07/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Task of Amontillado|Integration Part 15: The Task of Amontillado]] 
10/09/12 [[User:Robotech_Master/More Foxed|Longer Fused, More Foxed]] 
10/14/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Integrate Raids|Integration Part 16: The Integrate Raids]] 
10/18/12 [[User:JonBuck/Marshals|Marshals]] 
10/21/12 [[User:Robotech_Master/Kandace Jenni Friendship|Kandace and Jenni: A Beautiful Friendship]] 
10/26/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Family Matters|Integration Part 17: Family Matters]] 
11/14/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Many Meetings|Integration Part 18: Many Meetings]] 
12/13/12 [[User:Jetfire/Sum of Their Parts|Sum of Their Parts]], [[User:Jetfire/Walkabout|Walkabout]] 
12/15/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Meetings Completing|Integration Part 19: Meetings Completing]] 
12/23/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Prodigals|Integration Part 20: Prodigals]] 
12/31/12 [[User:Robotech Master/Enemy Lines|Integration Part 21: Enemy Lines]]

==2013==
01/22/13 [[User:JonBuck/Fly With Me|Fly With Me]] 
01/29/13 [[User:Robotech_Master/jeanette-lioness|Jeanette & Tamarind: The Second-Hand Lioness]] 
02/01/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Alpha Strike|Integration Part 22: Alpha Strike]] 
02/13/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Universe of Battle|Integration Part 23: Universe of Battle]] 
02/19/13 [[User:Robotech Master/What Happened Mouse|Integration Part 24: What Happened to the Mouse?]] 
02/23/13 [[User:Robotech_Master/Rochelle Rufia Redux|Rochelle & Rufia Redux: Foxing About]] 
02/27/13 [[User:Robotech Master/The Big Date|Integration Part 25 (Epilogue): The Big Date]] 
03/24/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Impossible Things|Impossible Things]] 
04/23/13 [[User:Jetfire/All_Spark_Bulletin|All Spark Bulletin]] 
04/30/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Aloha Stonegates|Aloha, Stonegates!]], [[User:Robotech Master/Skunked|Skunked!]] 
06/03/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Paws Up|Paws Up!]] 
06/24/13 [[User:Jetfire/Spies_Among_Us|Spies Among Us]] 
08/27/13 [[User:Robotech Master/A Wolf at the Door|Wolves in the Fold, Part One: A Wolf at the Door]] 
09/15/13 [[Taking the Plunge]] 
09/24/13 [[User:Jetfire/Broken_Crown|Broken Crown]] 
10/06/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Spotted Stowaway|Madison Brubeck and the Spotted Stowaway]], [[User:Robotech Master/Saints Marching|The Saints Go Marching In]] 
11/17/13 [[User:Claude_LeChat/Alpha Camp|Alpha Camp]] 
11/22/13 [[User:Claude LeChat/Return to Alpha Camp|Return to Alpha Camp]] 
12/03/13 [[User:Jetfire/Spacer_Oddity| A Spacer Oddity]] 
12/08/13 [[User:Robotech_Master/A_Fritzmas_Carol|A Fritzmas Carol]] 
12/20/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Yield Ahead|Merging Traffic II: Yield Ahead]] 
12/22/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Good Bad Fritzy|The Good, the Bad, and the Fritzy]] 
12/26/13 [[User:Robotech Master/Family Lynx|Family Lynx]]

==2014==
01/11/14 [[User:Robotech Master/A_Wolf_in_Sheep's_Clothing|Wolves in the Fold, Part Two: A Wolf in Sheep's Clothing]] 
01/13/14 [[User:Jetfire/Spice Girls|Spice Girls]] 
01/18/14 [[User:Robotech Master/The General|The General]] 
01/30/14 [[User:Robotech Master/Greatest Show|The Greatest Show]] 
02/09/14 [[User:Robotech Master/GI Joe|G.I. Joe]] 
02/12/14 [[User:Robotech_Master/Joseph_Life|Joseph Steader, This is Your Life!]] 
02/12/14 [[User:Jetfire/Cat_Scratch_Fever|Cat Scratch Fever]] 
02/14/14 [[User:Robotech Master/Pride Lioness|Pride of Lioness]] 
02/19/14 [[User:Robotech_Master/shell_game|The Gondwana Grand Tour, Prologue: Shell Game]] 
03/02/14 [[User:Jetfire/Rescue_911|Rescue 911]] 
03/13/14 [[User:Robotech_Master/Where_Everybody_Knows_Your_Name|Where Everybody Knows Your Name]] 
03/15/14 [[User:Jetfire/In_Space|In Space...]] 
03/16/14 [[User:Robotech Master/Kevin De-Claude|Kevin, De-Claude]] 
03/23/14 [[User:Robotech Master/Final Countdown|The Final Countdown]] 
05/10/14 [[User:Robotech Master/youngguns|Jeanette & Tamarind: The Young Guns]] 
06/15/14 [[User:Robotech_Master/ggt_uplift|The Gondwana Grand Tour, Chapter One: Uplift and the Tunnel]] 
07/12/14 [[User:Robotech Master/Totalia Prelude|Return to Totalia, Part One: Prelude]] 
07/24/14 [[User:Jetfire/The_Touch|The Touch]] 
10/22/14 [[User:Robotech_Master/Dog Day Morning|Dog Day Morning]] 
11/15/14 [[User:Robotech Master/When the Lady Smiles|Merging Traffic III: When the Lady Smiles]]

==2015==
01/27/15 [[User:Robotech_Master/Ride_Sally|Marshals: Beginnings, Episode One: Ride, Sally]] 
01/27/15 [[User:Robotech_Master/Reaping_the_Whirlwind|Marshals: Beginnings, Episode Two: Reaping the Whirlwind]] 
04/21/15 [[User:Robotech Master/Parallels Visitors|Return to Totalia, Part Two: Parallels, Part One: Visitors]] 
04/21/15 [[User:Jetfire/The_Power|The Power]] 
05/16/15 [[User:Robotech Master/Parallels Clementine|Return to Totalia, Part Two: Parallels, Part Two: Clementine]] 
06/16/15 [[User:Jetfire/United_Way|United Way]] 
06/17/15 [[User:Robotech_Master/Parallels Fleet|Return to Totalia, Part Two: Parallels, Part Three: The Fleet]] 
07/06/15 [[User:JonBuck/FADE IN|FADE IN]] and [[User:Robotech_Master/Tick Tock Tick|Tick Tock Tick]] 
12/09/15 [[User:Claude LeChat/The Wolf and the Father|The Wolf and the Father]]

==2016==
01/07/16 [[User:Robotech_Master/Darling_Clementine|Oh My Darling Clementine]] 
01/26/16 [[User:Jetfire/All_Hell_Breakin_Loose|All Hell's Breakin' Loose]] 
01/28/16 [[User:Robotech_Master/ANGLE ON|ANGLE ON]] 
01/29/16 [[User:Robotech_Master/DISSOLVE TO|DISSOLVE TO]] 
02/19/16 [[User:Claude LeChat/Imperfect Coupling|Imperfect Coupling]], [[User:Robotech Master/Cold and Wet Nose for News|Cold and Wet Nose for News]] 
04/07/16 [[User:Jetfire/Riding_The_Eye_of_the_Storm |Riding the Eye of the Storm]]

User talk:Robotech Master/FreeRIDErs dircut

2016-03-01T03:05:39Z

Antimatter: Notes on the DC

==Notes on the DC==

:The cargo flier had crashed in the Towers, '''the deepest, hottest part of the so-called Billion Year Drought''' that left the majority of a supercontinent without a drop of water and turned an ocean the size of Earth’s Pacific to sand, dust, and hardpan.
::It is a little odd to call the Towers, which is a place, part of the Drought, which was an event. Really it's a part of the Dry Ocean which was caused by the Drought.

:Without the large equipment to simply disassemble hulks and haul away usable parts, Ryan had focused '''in''' getting damaged vehicles running again, however '''she''' could.
:: 'On,' and 'he' (for a little while longer at least :-)

:“'''Leave us allow''' these meat-brained squares to cogitate that for a while,”
::I think there's a word missing in there.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 21:05, 29 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Merging Traffic

2016-03-01T02:48:36Z

Antimatter: Notes on the DC

==Typos==
Hey, I just noticed in the fight scene with the AlphaWolf virus, there are a couple places where you wrote "lunched" where I assume you meant "lunged". Great story!
--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 21:57, 25 July 2012 (UTC)
:Good catch. I must have been hungry when I wrote that! :) Fixed. —[[User:Robotech Master|Robotech Master]] ([[User talk:Robotech Master|talk]]) 02:01, 26 July 2012 (UTC)

==Notes on the DC==

:But life went on. Lillibet went out and chatted with her friends, '''and as they got older''' her friends got progressively more adventurous.
::How long does Lillibet have Uncia for before she escapes? This makes it sound like it was years, but that doesn't seem right.

:She initiated a transaction, paying 1,000 monetary units for a download of FreeRIDE, a fetter-stripping jailbreak program.
::Still having some trouble with the value of the ''mu.'' 1,000 for a software download, but multiple working rides for that same amount? (In ''Deserted''.)

:Of course, RIDEs usually had safeguards to prevent that kind of thing. Even “unfettered” units like Uncia still had redundant firewalls and safety nets to protect the human half of the fusing combination.
::This seems to contradict what Terry told Zane in ''Deserted'', and also what happens later with other RIDEs bodyjacking who are clearly not infected with Amontillado. Actually, it looks like the only benefit of Amontillado to an unfettered RIDE (well, if it worked as advertised) may be the ability to keep the human asleep. They can clearly maintain control of the fused body without that.

:“If you really want me to be yours that badly, I will be,” Rochelle said. “I’ll let you run the body in '''Fusion''', I’ll be your pet in Walker, and I’ll do my best to be a figment of your imagination if we Integrate. I can’t blame you for holding a grudge after how your own human owner treated you.”
::Fuse.

:“So I’m stuck in ‘Mt. St. Helen of Troy’ mode.”
:: :-)

:“And I can’t even ask the manufacturer for help, because I’m not her '''original''' owner and even if I were, FreeRIDE voided her warranty.”
::Should that be ''legal'' owner?

:“She’s got so many tethers it’s a wonder she can even think at all.”
::Is there a reason they're called tethers instead of fetters in this story?

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 20:48, 29 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Meat the Press

2016-03-01T02:07:15Z

Antimatter: Notes on the DC

== Possible Typos ==

“I’m not getting anything at all now,” Rochelle reported. “We’re dead in the water up there, Rhi. He’s got us.”

:I think it should be We're dead in the water up ''here''.

Rochelle and Rhianna like stared at Annette Hewer.

:Not sure if this is a mistake or not, but the ''like'' seems awkward.

Nice work! --[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 03:47, 17 August 2012 (UTC)

::Thanks for the typo spottin'. Fixed 'em. —[[User:Robotech Master|Robotech Master]] ([[User talk:Robotech Master|talk]]) 05:42, 17 August 2012 (UTC)

==Notes on the DC==

:Starbuck Peet’s Best Seattle Coffeehouse
:: :-)

:“What on earth crawled up '''AlpoWoof'''’s butt and died?”
::Not sure if that if a really weird typo or a joke I don't get. Probably the latter.

I like it whenever Cascadia makes an appearance. I'm from Portland myself, so I guess it must feel like familiar territory or something.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 20:07, 29 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Assault Batteries

2016-03-01T02:02:39Z

Antimatter: /* Notes on the DC */

Ooohhh maannn! Why do these stories always end on these things called Cliffs? :D

I'm loving these stories Robotech, Jon and Jetfire.
(Though I could do without the hanging at the end of the chapters. hehe.)
[[User:VoyseyS|VoyseyS]] ([[User talk:VoyseyS|talk]]) 19:14, 18 September 2012 (UTC)

==Notes on the DC==

:“I have been monitoring our ten '''‘Fortunatos’''' as closely as I might since the two cured RIDEs have returned to the camp, but I have not seen any unusual movements near them, nor detected unusual network traffic. Of course, whisker laser transmissions are very hard to detect.”
::Wouldn't the infected RIDEs be the 'Montressors,' and their trapped humans the 'Fortunatos?'

:The '''Dream Chaser''' had fore and aft retractable pulse cannons and two dozen of Kaylee’s favored micro-missiles in underwing FAST paks—the weapons were temporary, at least.
::In previous chapters it was "Dreamchaser," which I think works a little better. (Or at least it matches with Starmaster.) There are a few more instances of "Dream Chaser" in this chapter also.

:“This is going to be tough. If they run, I’m a little '''too big to chase''',
::"Too big to ''give'' chase" would be clearer.

:The problem with obvious places were rather self-evident, but it was just like her uncle. The problem was that if there was another Integrate aboard they could have done any number of things if they found the DIN.
::Singular/plural disagreement in the first sentence. Also, two sentences in a row starting with "The problem" is a little awkward.

:To her knowledge neither he nor his followers had ever killed another Intie.
::Quinoa at least knows Fritz killed Paulie, if I remember correctly.

:The sphinx started hyper-saturating her body with oxygen, topping off her batteries.
::Inties can convert oxygen to electrical power? If so, why couldn't she have done that in the first place to get above 3% charge? (I totally could have missed something here.)

:For convenience, the network had been arranged to have a 1:1 topology between the virtual and real worlds, which meant that the '''DINS''' in here would be in exactly the same places as outside.
::DINs.

:Rochelle reached out with a flood of DIN encrypted network probes masked as something from another '''Integrated'''.
::Integrate.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 19:59, 29 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Assault Batteries

2016-03-01T01:59:45Z

Antimatter: Notes on the DC

Ooohhh maannn! Why do these stories always end on these things called Cliffs? :D

I'm loving these stories Robotech, Jon and Jetfire.
(Though I could do without the hanging at the end of the chapters. hehe.)
[[User:VoyseyS|VoyseyS]] ([[User talk:VoyseyS|talk]]) 19:14, 18 September 2012 (UTC)

==Notes on the DC==

:“I have been monitoring our ten '''‘Fortunatos’''' as closely as I might since the two cured RIDEs have returned to the camp, but I have not seen any unusual movements near them, nor detected unusual network traffic. Of course, whisker laser transmissions are very hard to detect.”
::Wouldn't the infected RIDEs be the 'Montressors,' and their trapped humans the 'Fortunatos?'

:The '''Dream Chaser''' had fore and aft retractable pulse cannons and two dozen of Kaylee’s favored micro-missiles in underwing FAST paks—the weapons were temporary, at least.
::In ''Spaceflight of Fancy'' it was "Dreamchaser," which I think works a little better. (Or at least it matches with Starmaster.) There are a few more instances of "Dream Chaser" in this chapter also.

:“This is going to be tough. If they run, I’m a little '''too big to chase''',
::"Too big to ''give'' chase" would be clearer.

:The problem with obvious places were rather self-evident, but it was just like her uncle. The problem was that if there was another Integrate aboard they could have done any number of things if they found the DIN.
::Singular/plural disagreement in the first sentence. Also, two sentences in a row starting with "The problem" is a little awkward.

:To her knowledge neither he nor his followers had ever killed another Intie.
::Quinoa at least knows Fritz killed Paulie, if I remember correctly.

:The sphinx started hyper-saturating her body with oxygen, topping off her batteries.
::Inties can convert oxygen to electrical power? If so, why couldn't she have done that in the first place to get above 3% charge? (I totally could have missed something here.)

:For convenience, the network had been arranged to have a 1:1 topology between the virtual and real worlds, which meant that the '''DINS''' in here would be in exactly the same places as outside.
::DINs.

:Rochelle reached out with a flood of DIN encrypted network probes masked as something from another '''Integrated'''.
::Integrate.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 19:59, 29 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Kaylee Anny

2016-02-29T06:03:25Z

Antimatter: Notes on the DC

==Notes on the DC==

:“How many species do they plan on bringing into the world for this war of theirs? So far they’ve got deer, elk, horses, cougars, lions, bison, raccoons, and birds. Birds are even worse. Why bother with them when everyone can fly?” the '''second-eldest''' RIDE continued. Once his test program completed, the number of RIDE species had exploded as the Nextus engineers were permitted to try anything and everything.
:“Who’d have thought that the '''second eldest''' of us could be so crass?” Frank padded into the clearing, swaggering his way towards Kaylee. “You’d think that after a few more virtual years you’d have learned some manners from Mama Patil.”
::Why ''second'' eldest? Are you counting Rattigan? He's not really a RIDE, though.

:He stood up, leaving most of Vince’s carcass on the ground, and growled. “Get away from my girl.”
::I believe we haven't been introduced to Vince by name yet, so it is a bit jarring that the Narrator starts to use his name out of nowhere. He introduces himself to Kaylee a little later (as Vinnie), and that seems like a natural place for us to learn his name.

:When they arrived in the building that had seen use as a flier hangar '''before RIDE program''', there were more testing platforms than ever before. They were mostly empty, and Hewer noted one appeared to be a rabbit. “A bunny? Really?”
::Missing "the."

: :A few days and everyone can see me!: Kaylee confided nervously to her '''ride''' at the end of it.
::Rider.

:She read them in seconds, for reference, before de-Fusing and heading for her recharge alcove to enter the VR-space where all '''Ris''' spent their downtime.
::RIs.

:Dr. Patil’s family had somehow retained '''her''' Bangalore accent despite being on Zharus for at least a century.
::Their. Or something different like "Dr. Patil had somehow retained her Bangalore accent despite her family being on Zharus for at least a century."

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 00:03, 29 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/The Crew

2016-02-29T02:57:57Z

Antimatter: Comments on the DC

==Comments on the DC==

:so they could set up a triage that would return the most least-damaged RIDEs to life based on the supplies they had.
::I get what you're saying here but I think it would say the same thing while being a lot less awkward if you took out "least-damaged," leaving "return the most RIDEs to life based on the supplies they had."

:We can add real micromanipulator '''waldos''', not these pointless tweezers.”
:“Also, we’re gonna need to kit him out with some micromanipulator '''waldoes''' so we can get into hard-to-reach spots for repairs.”
::Two different spellings. A quick Google found both spellings in use, so I'm not sure which is more correct. I think I saw "waldoes" in one of your previous chapters, but I can't remember which. Personally I think "waldos" looks better.

:Linda waved a hand. “Hey, comm RIDE here'''?''' You want to light up a bird, we’re your girl.”
::Might work better with an exclamation point instead of a question mark.

:“Yeeeeees. Or at least you think you are. But I also know the truth you aren’t telling yourself.”
:LindaGirl blinked. “What truth is that?”
:“That you reeeeeally kinda like it when I’m nasty to you.”
:LindaGirl cocked her head. “I thought that…kinda goes without saying?”

I'm really glad you added this chat and the safeword thing. The only problem is, earlier in the chapter she ''does'' say it, at least twice:

:“No, no, it’s alright, really!” LindaGirl said. She giggled, nervously. '''“I actually kinda like it.”'''
:“That…might be too much information,” Paul said. “Anyway…um…right. Assistant. Let me get you kitted out with nanolathe gear, and I’ll show you what to do for this one…”

And:

:“I’ll make you a deal. You help me get my degree…in RIDE Technology, I just made up my mind…and you can have me for the rest of my life.” LindaGirl grinned. “You’re not a bad person. You’ve been mistreated by humans, I can understand that. You need to be the one in charge. Well, okay, I’ll let you be. Apart from the forced Fuse thing, and not even letting me show my face, you’ve been really nice to me.” She lowered her voice to a whisper. '''“And to be honest, I actually kinda liked it when you were nasty.”'''

Personally I like the way they deal with it in the new scene, so I might find a way to take out LindaGirl's explicit mentioning that she likes it in the earlier scenes.

:“Whenever we can get an '''anon''' connection, Lilli, sure,” he replied.
::"Anon" is a little odd here, since it doesn't really relate to whether or not they can get a connection. He could just say "Whenever we can get a connection."

:“Okay,” AlphaWolf finally said to Paul, Fenris, and the Lindas in private. “There really isn’t much we can do about the poor beings trapped by that trojan—RIDE and human. For now I want to focus on whoever created the thing. Shelley gave us some tools we can use to dissect the code. With any luck the creator was sloppy enough to leave some signs—I’m making tracking this criminal down our top priority. Also, get in touch with Shelley herself for advice on getting these people out and the RIDEs cured. If she can’t come out here herself maybe she knows someone who can help these poor souls.”
::It seems odd that AlphaWolf is calling Rochelle "Shelly" since he really doesn't know her. Even Paul calls her Rochelle right after this.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 20:57, 28 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Citizen Katie

2016-02-28T23:15:53Z

Antimatter: Comments on the DC

==Comments on the DC==

:The first was the Transverse Tunnel,
::Wasn't it called the ''Traverse'' Tunnel?

:Tax incentives for production of DE shells without '''Ris''' included. A Polis-run RI nursery, with volunteer '''Ris''' to act as parents during the “baking” process.
::RIs

:Katie '''will''' looked uncomfortable over the whole thing.
::Still?

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 17:15, 28 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Spaceflight of Fancy

2016-02-28T06:32:40Z

Antimatter: Comments on the DC

==Comments on the DC==

:The bay finished pressurizing, '''so exhausted Leila''' opened the aft door and disconnected herself from the sub’s power connector.
::I think it would feel more natural to say '''so an exhausted Leila'''.

:They also fitted Katie out with the obligatory private-parts-protecting metal bikini, which was more for the protection of public decency than any actual armor value.
::It never made sense to me why they would use actual metal. Why not just hardlight? They could make it look like the metal bikini if that's what they want, but they could also just go with something that looks like normal clothes.

:Guinevere kicked in the lifters and roared away, taking a deep breath to steel herself for what was to come.
::I think that would be Lillibet taking the deep breath.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 00:32, 28 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Stockholm Vacation

2016-02-28T04:41:54Z

Antimatter: Comments on the DC

==Comments on the DC==

:In fact…Paul felt his '''hard''' start beating faster.
:: Ha!

:“—but I don’t exactly see any new '''Des''' sitting around here, do you?”
::DEs.

:Paul took a deep breath. His heart was pounding again, just like it had right before he had traded himself to Tocsin. All his work over the last few hours had been leading up to this one moment—and just as with Tocsin, he was about to lose another degree of freedom. '''But this one couldn’t be as neatly measured out as a five-month prison term. This could very well be for life.'''
::This never really made sense to me. Paul only agreed to stay at AlphaCamp for five months. I think if Fenris tried to hold on to him longer than that against his will, AlphaWolf and/or Tocsin would intervene, since they promised to get him back at the end of his term.

:This also meant that “stupid RIDE tricks” like eating and drinking through the RIDE’s head weren’t going to be possible with Fenris.
::Why wouldn't fenris have a tube (basically an esophagus) to take food from his mouth down and into the human's stomach? It doesn't seem all that hard to implement, and isn't being able to eat in fuse an essential desert survival ability?

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 22:41, 27 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/A Meating of the Board

2016-02-27T08:25:28Z

Antimatter: Comments on the DC

== Noticed a Typo ==
On the very last line of the story, it should say:

:In the shadows across the bay, Tocsin crouched, watching… '''an''' unbalanced gleam in his eagle eye.

Also, I just want to say again that I'm really enjoying the stories in this new setting. Keep it up! :-)

[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 18:30, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

:Tyop fixed! Thanks for reading, and thanks for liking. :) --[[User:JonBuck|Buck]] ([[User talk:JonBuck|talk]]) 04:57, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

==Comments on the DC==

:'''Felix''' was gone, and the secret door behind him was in place, undamaged.
::Should be Fritz. (I remember from my first read-through that his name used to be Felix, but that hasn't been mentioned yet at this point.)

:“So perhaps all Zane '''need''' do is keep Fritz toying with him for as long as he can, as the bird who plays wounded to lure the cats away from the nest.
::Needs.

:Everyone all the way to the '''BBQ''' place saw the landing, ya know,
::You might want to spell this out, unless she actually said it as B-B-Q rather than barbecue.

:The RIDE was one of the largest of its type Rhianna had ever seen, a Nextus LEO(f)-HSA-008C.
::No error here, I was just amused that when I saw this model number my immediate reaction was to google it so see what it looked like, until I realized a split second later that, duh, that's not going to work :-)

:The woman knew how to pull strings, or had done favors for more influential people in Nextus Administration she “retired” with her choice of RIDE.
::This looks like two sentences got mashed together or something.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 02:25, 27 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/All Aboard

2016-02-27T04:27:49Z

Antimatter: Created page with "==Typos & Comments== :“She’s coming along to the meeting as an observer for the rest of the '''Integrate'''. ::Integrates. :“But he looked lonely, and I wonder if Hug..."

==Typos & Comments==

:“She’s coming along to the meeting as an observer for the rest of the '''Integrate'''.
::Integrates.

:“But he looked lonely, and I wonder if Hugh ever gets another RIDE, given that one's already taken...Hugh took a liking to him.”
::Okay, I read this sentence several times, and I just can't quite figure out what it is trying to say.

:“Myla, '''login''' here. I’m appointing you and Sophie pro tem heads of security with full access to all files.”
::Log in. (Two words when it's a verb.)

:“Well, at least now we’ll be able to view everything '''while review''' those personnel files.
::''While we review'' or ''while reviewing'' would work.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 22:27, 26 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/DISSOLVE TO

2016-02-26T07:20:37Z

Antimatter: Created page with "==Typos/Comments== :“Every episode and behind-the-scenes featurette we’ve '''gone done''' is on here. ::Got done. :“We’ll just have to bite the bullet and keep our ..."

==Typos/Comments==

:“Every episode and behind-the-scenes featurette we’ve '''gone done''' is on here.
::Got done.

:“We’ll just have to bite the bullet and keep our eyes and ears peeled for any of his ‘'''Ascendant'''’ who show their faces,” Jade said.
::I was about to say that it should be ''Ascendants,'' but then I realized that you're probably not intending it to be a noun like ''Integrates,'' but as an adjective, in which case it is perfectly fine.

:The selfsame skimmer van Tallyhawk had driven up '''from Cape Nord''' pulled off the aerodrome access route. It turned onto a side path marked “PRIVATE ACCESS” and in smaller print “Authorized personnel only.”
::Do you mean from Aloha?

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 01:20, 26 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/ANGLE ON

2016-02-26T07:08:17Z

Antimatter: Noticed a couple typos.

==A couple typos==

:Flint isn’t really a that bad, as men go.

:“I’ll have have some, then.”

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 01:08, 26 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Dating Games

2016-02-26T07:02:04Z

Antimatter: A few comments on the DC edition.

== Notes on the DC ==

:Sophie chuckled. “I could hear the gears grinding as she '''threw in''' full reverse.”
::Stick an ''it'' in there!

:The other one faces on downtown, which seemed like it might suit Myla and Sophie. Or you can trade if you like.”
::Maybe not technically an error, but "faces on downtown" sounds unnatural to me. "Faces downtown" or "looks out on downtown" would work better.

:“Good day, Mr. Brubeck,” '''that worthy greeted him'''.
::I can't figure out what that was supposed to be.

:Here’s a RAM chip for you. Open wide for num-nums.”
::Okay this is really nitpicking, but unless terminology has changed, it wouldn't make sense for RAM to be a storage medium since it is volatile (it doesn't hold data when it loses power.) Sure, they ''could'' make a device that stored data in RAM and kept it powered up, but ''why?'' They must have something more appropriate for a data chip.

:“Not like it seems to bother most of the other Integrated.”
::If you are trying to standardize on ''Integrate'' or ''Integrates'' rather than ''Integrated,'' there's one here.

:Hell, how do we know there’s not some kind of Integrated conspiracy moving at the highest circles of power right now?”
::Here too.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 01:02, 26 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/RIDEgirls Day Out

2016-02-25T06:11:12Z

Antimatter: Created page with "Kaylee finished tidying up, and stood back to '''satisfy''' her handiwork. :Study? --~~~~"

Kaylee finished tidying up, and stood back to '''satisfy''' her handiwork.
:Study?
--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 00:11, 25 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Integrates

2016-02-25T04:46:22Z

Antimatter: Comments on the Director's Cut

== Comments on the Director's Cut ==
Still enjoying the added Intie society angle. Also, as a fan of ''Friendship Is Magic,'' I approve of the additional references. I think I have seen more ''Chakat Universe'' references in the director's cut stories than I remember in the old versions too. That was the first online fiction setting I got interested in, so it's fun to see those references too. One of the great things about this setting to me is that the 20th century pop culture craze makes references and pseudo-crossovers quite natural.

:Rhianna and Kaylee’s home the upper level of that building, fitted out as an apartment.
::Missing a word or two in that sentence.

:Rochelle had her own place by the park, though sometimes crashed on Rhianna’s couch.
::I don't think it's actually an error, but I think it would sound more natural to say "though '''she''' sometimes crashed on Rhianna’s couch."

:“You don’t make DINS with ‘practice,’ they come from the technomages alone!”
::DINs should have a lower-case s.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 22:46, 24 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/All Nighter

2016-02-25T02:40:16Z

Antimatter: A few comments on the DC edition.

== Defaultsort issue ==
No IWIR (yet), but the sorting on the category page has finally annoyed me enough to complain about it. Could somebody prepend a zero to all the single-digit "episode" numbers for the Integration series? The way it's set up right now, the category page lists 10-19, then 1, then 20-25, then 2-9. Changing the defaultsort of the first nine from "Part 1" to "Part 01" and so on should fix that. --[[User:Proginoskes|Proginoskes]] ([[User talk:Proginoskes|talk]]) 14:23, 16 May 2013 (CDT)

== Comments on DC ==
I love the changes and new scenes here. They really do make the whole story feel more coherent and give the events here more context. (I know that's the point, but I thought I'd mention that I appreciate it.)

I only noticed one error:

:“And if I were an Integrate, I’d be monitoring net searches for any suspicious activity relating to '''Integrate'''—
::Should be ''Integrates'' or maybe ''integration.''

And a few comments:

:Myla got a plain vanilla cone while Rhianna Fused with Kaylee and got a Fuser-sized three-scoop bowl of Death by Chocolate.
::It's interesting that fuzer-sized servings are a thing, since the human's organic body and stomach are still normal-sized. Do people who fuse a lot normally need to eat more to power the nanoprobes?

:Uplift was a city of over fifteen million, counting the suburbs in their own smaller climate domes.
::Since this is before RIDE citizenship, I assume the population figures only count humans? I'm curious how much they increase, both for the individual polities and for the planet as a whole after governments start to officially recognize RIDEs as people.

:Still, Colonel Gray wouldn’t have any reason to be cloaked, not here. Fritz primed his armcannon capacitors. He wasn’t going to use full power, not here.
::Having two sentences end with ''comma, not here'' so close together was a bit jarring.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 20:40, 24 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Cold and Wet Nose for News

2016-02-22T07:53:03Z

Antimatter: Created page with "As they arrived at their ship, the '''[name]''', : :-) --~~~~"

As they arrived at their ship, the '''[name]''',
: :-)
--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 01:53, 22 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Robotech Master/Deserted

2016-02-15T11:18:52Z

Antimatter: /* First Comment! */

== First Comment! ==
----
Hey, I just finished reading this story, and [[User:Robotech_Master/Merging_Traffic|Merging Traffic]]. I just want to say I love the new setting, and I really enjoyed both stories. I do have one small critique, though. In this story it seemed a little bit unnatural that Zane and Terry were talking about staying together forever so soon after they first met. I guess it seemed a little bit like talking about getting married halfway through the first date. :) I think Terry especially, because of his past, and because of how bitter and set against having a human partner he seems to be at first, could have more internal conflict about it, and take longer to come around. Anyway, this is only my opinion, and I'm only mentioning it to give you another perspective. I really did enjoy the story. --[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 06:38, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

:Hey, thanks for the kind words, and I'll think about that. But part of the thing is, they're so close even after the first share, they basically already know everything about each other so there's no reason to be hostile or suspicious. In fact, he knew it from the moment they first Fused, and Terry didn't get all grabby-for-control-no-no-''you''-can't-have-any the way previous masters did. And Terry knows that Zane is the kind of person he's been missing in his life. (He still has a little trouble believing it when they're split, at first, which is why he's so bemused in his conversation in the DRRT, but he ''knows'' regardless.) If Zane had been another asshole like his past masters, he'd have known it immediately and had no qualms about leaving him where he could get a ride to safety.

:Really glad you liked it! --[[User:Robotech Master|Robotech Master]] ([[User talk:Robotech Master|talk]]) 12:55, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

Hello again! I've just started a re-read of all the FreeRIDErs stories so far. This series as a whole has really become one of my favorites. Anyway, I noticed these typos this time around:

:Terry knew that he would be a more comfortable place for Zach to sleep than any bed.
::Who's Zach?

:Okay, then. We’ll take them in.” He pauses, thought a moment.
::Looks like it should be "paused".

:'':Send them a million in the name of Ryan Stonecross and Kaylee Cross,'': Zane sent to Terry, keeping a straight face.
::Isn't Ryan's last name Stonegate? Or is this a reference I'm not getting?

Keep up the awesome work on these stories! Also, I've been assuming that posting typos is helpful, but let me know if it gets annoying and I'll stop. :-)

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 07:11, 16 November 2012 (UTC)

----

I noticed the updates you've been making to the older stories and decided to start re-reading. I'm not sure if you're interested in continuing to edit these at all but I thought I would post some things I noticed during the re-read just in case. Some are errors, but some are just comments or opinions, so take them for what they're worth.

:“The very last resort. '''Nexus'''’s armed version of Internal Revenue: the Materiel Recovery Service.”
::Nextus

:“There’s a '''three-foot''' space under the floor. Dad used it for smuggling cargo sometimes."
::Make this metric for consistency?

:“We’ve done a lot today,” '''Terry''' said, stifling a yawn. “Why don’t we put off that decision until tomorrow?”
::It looks like this is actually Zane talking.

:“DVDs and Blu-rays were the last time they put movies on physical media, and a lot of the old discs never got reissued in later '''digital''' formats. Of course, even by then Dad had already ripped his collection to '''digital''', but he swore there was just something about watching them on the original hardware that made the whole experience better somehow.”
:: DVD and Blu-ray are already digital formats, so it seems a bit odd for Zane to use the word digital here like it is a distinction. I don't remember the details from the story where a lot of the old Earth media was actually discovered at the moment, but I'm thinking it must have been in some sort of digital format too, yes?

:'':I’m sure they’d be happy to have you,:'' Terry sent back. '':It’s a much nicer place to live, too.:''
:'':Can’t wait to see it,:'' Zane said.
::Zane grew up in Nextus, and he's never been to Uplift?

:They turned on their headlights and drove on, emerging from the Tunnel a short time later to see the city of Uplift spread out before them under a gleaming hardlight dome like some kind of giant snow globe.
::Didn't it get detailed in a later story that Uplift actually has a bunch of domes joined together?

:“Crap! Can you call that in? Track them?” Zane asked, poking '''his head''' up from behind an air conditioning unit.
::their head (to be consistent)

:He turned into an alley beside the building that '''debarked''' into a small nook that had been left over when two other buildings had butted up against the dome and each other.
::Not totally sure about this one but I don't think that is correct usage of ''debark''.

:“Uh, sure, no problem.” He tried his very best to look as though very male mechanics turned into '''short''', busty anthropomorphic she-lynxes in front of him every day.
::I don't know exactly how tall Kaylee's fuser form is, but it seems odd to refer to any fuser as short, especially from Zane's currently non-fused perspective.
::This reminds me, it would be nice to mention the size of a fuser when Zane and Terry first fuse up. I don't think there's anything to indicate that they are any larger than a normal human.

:Happily, the auctioneer was willing to come to immediate payment terms for the three RIDEs, selling them for only about four times what they might have fetched at auction. Even the decrepit ruins of Merle ended up running 1,000 mu.
:“You could get at least four complete and working female RIDEs for just what they charged for Merle,” Terry groused. “Or two male.”
::I'm having trouble with the value of the ''mu'' here. They just paid 50 ''mu'' for the "not for sale" collar, which I can't imagine would be worth more than a few dollars. But you can get a complete working male RIDE for 500, or a female for 250? Even if you say the ''mu'' is equal in value to the dollar (which would make the collar ridiculous at $50) these prices for RIDEs are hardly significant. It doesn't seem like the lower price of female models would be a significant motivation for crossriding.

:He closed the '''donkey'''’s metal head, and it latched shut.
::mule

:'':I’ll just keep an eye on the RIDE enthusiast forums,:'' Terry replied. '':He’ll turn up sooner or later.”''
::Should have ended with a colon instead of a quotation mark. Also, I can't remember him ever turning up later. This seems like it was setting up for something.

:He began by having Terry beam them copies of his memories relating to the altered books, his being stranded in the desert, and the suspicious actions of the three co-investors shortly before the bomb exploded on his flier.
::Wouldn't he want to include the attack on his apartment too?

:“It’s up to you. If you want to keep them, stay Fused with them, and run the company on their behalf, be my guest."
::This strikes me as way too big of an offer for the situation. He is basically offering the running of the company to three unknown people he just met.

:'':Especially if I kick my lifters in a little and make us lighter,:'' Terry pointed out, doing so.
::Couldn't they have just hovered up the shaft with Terry's lifters? I'm pretty sure it gets established later that fusers can fly.

:'':Secret tunnel,:'' Zane subvocalized '''from''' his mastoid implant.
::What I'm picturing here is Zane subvocalizing, and his implant picking it up and sending it to Terry. If that is correct, wouldn't it be subvocalizing ''to'' his implant?

:'''Terry''' smiled despite himself. ''Thanks,'' he thought back.
::Okay, it might be vague since they're integrated at this point, but from the context it seems like this line should be Zane, not Terry.

I still love this setting, even though I've been mostly lost in the world of FIMFiction nowadays. You guys have been spoiling us with new stories and updates lately! I really hope you keep writing in this setting.

[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 05:18, 15 February 2016 (CST)

User talk:Jetfire/Spies Among Us

2013-06-25T23:25:06Z

Antimatter: Created page with "Wow. I've been eagerly awaiting the start of the big Earth vs. Zharus arc, and the was quite an awesome way to start heading in that direction! Please keep it up! *Waits for t..."

Wow. I've been eagerly awaiting the start of the big Earth vs. Zharus arc, and the was quite an awesome way to start heading in that direction! Please keep it up! *Waits for the next chapter* --[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 18:25, 25 June 2013 (CDT)

User talk:Robotech Master/Deserted

2012-11-16T07:11:50Z

Antimatter: Noticed a few typos.

User talk:Antimatter

2012-11-16T06:45:30Z

Antimatter: Created page with "Test!"

Test!

User talk:Robotech Master/More Foxed

2012-10-11T06:37:17Z

Antimatter:

Hey, great story! I stayed up ''way'' too late last night reading it. I really am addicted to this setting.

Anyway, I wasn't really looking for typos as I read it, but I did notice a few:

*I had wondered whether it was really fair to let the RIDEs play, but it turned out that without reliable net access they were limited to what they had in their own internal '''databased''', which for trivia weren’t necessarily any better than the good ol’ Mark 1 brain.

*from floral-print tourist rags to qubitite riches to freezing to death rags to hiding out in a guarded docking slip in a badlands town '''riches'''.

*I watched with some interest as the stewards and stewardesses secured Gordon in '''her''' seat.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 19:22, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

:Hey, thanks. I'll fix those. (Well, the first and third anyway. I'm not sure why you think "riches" is a typo there. The sentence structure being "from X rags to Y riches to A rags to B riches", whereupon X, Y, A, and B are descriptions of events…) —[[User:Robotech Master|Robotech Master]] ([[User talk:Robotech Master|talk]]) 22:20, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

::Ah, sorry. I read that sentence a few times and it just didn't click. I kept thinking it should end after "badlands town," and that you must have accidentally put riches in there an extra time. Now that you explain it it makes sense, though :-) --[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 06:23, 11 October 2012 (UTC)

User talk:Robotech Master/More Foxed

2012-10-11T06:23:46Z

Antimatter:

Hey, great story! I stayed up ''way'' to late last night reading it. I really am addicted to this setting.

Anyway, I wasn't really looking for typos as I read it, but I did notice a few:

*I had wondered whether it was really fair to let the RIDEs play, but it turned out that without reliable net access they were limited to what they had in their own internal '''databased''', which for trivia weren’t necessarily any better than the good ol’ Mark 1 brain.

*from floral-print tourist rags to qubitite riches to freezing to death rags to hiding out in a guarded docking slip in a badlands town '''riches'''.

*I watched with some interest as the stewards and stewardesses secured Gordon in '''her''' seat.

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 19:22, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

:Hey, thanks. I'll fix those. (Well, the first and third anyway. I'm not sure why you think "riches" is a typo there. The sentence structure being "from X rags to Y riches to A rags to B riches", whereupon X, Y, A, and B are descriptions of events…) —[[User:Robotech Master|Robotech Master]] ([[User talk:Robotech Master|talk]]) 22:20, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

::Ah, sorry. I read that sentence a few times and it just didn't click. I kept thinking it should end after "badlands town," and that you must have accidentally put riches in there an extra time. Now that you explain it it makes sense, though :-) --[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 06:23, 11 October 2012 (UTC)

User talk:Robotech Master/More Foxed

2012-10-10T19:22:15Z

Antimatter: Created page with "Hey, great story! I stayed up ''way'' to late last night reading it. I really am addicted to this setting. Anyway, I wasn't really looking for typos as I read it, but I did n..."

User:Antimatter

2012-09-20T06:23:57Z

Antimatter: Created page with "Hi! I'm just posting this so my name stops being red, and to let you know I'm not a spammer! --~~~~"

Hi!

I'm just posting this so my name stops being red, and to let you know I'm not a spammer!

--[[User:Antimatter|Antimatter]] ([[User talk:Antimatter|talk]]) 06:23, 20 September 2012 (UTC)

User talk:Robotech Master/Meat the Press

2012-08-17T03:47:58Z

Antimatter: Typos

User talk:Robotech Master/A Meating of the Board

2012-08-13T18:30:49Z

Antimatter: Created page with "== Noticed a Typo == On the very last line of the story, it should say: :In the shadows across the bay, Tocsin crouched, watching… '''an''' unbalanced gleam in his eagle ey..."

User talk:Robotech Master/Merging Traffic

2012-07-25T21:57:17Z

Antimatter: Created page with "==Typos== Hey, I just noticed in the fight scene with the AlphaWolf virus, there are a couple places where you wrote "lunched" where I assume you meant "lunged". Great story! ..."

Xanadu (setting)

2012-07-24T03:42:22Z

Antimatter: /* Setting Rules */

Sometime in 2000 or 2001 [[User:Bryan|Bryan Derksen]] had a talk with [[User:Xodiac|Xodiac]] and it sparked off an idea. A few months and a lot of conversations later and the Xanadu universe was born.

For Shifti-hosted Xanadu stories, see [[:Category:Xanadu]].

__TOC__

==History==

First came "NMF" (No More Fakes) in which an a dimension traveling wizard turns all the people at the "Raucous Chicken Clubs" annual Halloween Party into their costumes. But the person in control of that setting was very detail oriented, requiring that people writing in the universe mention every event that has happened in another story – if they were in the room where the event happened and even if it had no bearing on the story. Concerns over that that simple fact led [[User:Xodiac|Xodiac]] to talk to [[User:Bryan|Bryan]] about a story he was working on. That single conversation gave Bryan the idea to try and fix the situation. The result was a new setting – Xanadu – kicked off by the story of the [[Xanadu (story)|same name]].

==Overview==

It's on the November long weekend during some indeterminate year<ref>Actually there was a specific year set at one point. But Bryan has since removed it.</ref> Eric Winters, a rich and somewhat eccentric man, decides to bankroll a costume contest at the Kubla Con convention—known for it's costumes and somewhat wild nature. That year the con is overflowing, and Eric Winters himself brings an ancient Native American artifact – a raven mask. At the start of the awards ceremony he dons the mask and a blast of magic flashes out, effecting the entire convention center and its grounds, turning everyone into their costume. Eric Winters himself turns completely into a raven.

===The Transformation===

The transformation '''''isn't''''' into the costume exactly, but into what the costume represents. This means that two people wearing identical costumes could turn into two different things, and any powers you gain are controlled by what you believe to be true about the character. For instance, two people go to Xanadu as Superman – one has seen the movies and knows only what they show about Superman's powers and is rarely in character and the other is a “superfan”, knows everything about Superman and portrays the character exactly. The first turns gains the powers and weaknesses of Superman that were shown in the movies while the “superfan” gains all the powers and weaknesses ever created for Superman in all the media '''and''' becomes Superman to the extent that he no longer remembers having once been just a fan.<ref>[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=faq Xanadu FAQ]</ref>

===The Setting===

{{float tag| text= Note that an author is free to ignore many of the details established by other stories if they get in the way of their own story, and conversely it is best if authors try to avoid introducing major events in their stories that other authors wouldn't be able to plausibly ignore in turn. These collected setting details are intended as a useful source of inspiration, not as a straitjacket. One should never feel "required" to make mention of events that occurred in someone else's writing.| text-background=#eeeeee}}

Kubla Con takes place at “Xanadu” — the name given, lovingly and as a sly pun, to wherever the con is being held — in this case the "Orlando Convention Center". This non-existent (in the real world) location is a rather large convention center and hotel. The convention fills both the hotel and convention center – with various “SIG‘s’ (Special Interest Groups) housed in the smaller convention/meeting rooms in the hotel proper and the various parts of the convention center filled with the sponsored features of the con.

As the Orlando Convention Center is in Orlando, Florida, it is subject to Florida's weather. However, as the convention takes place in early November, the weather is fairly temperate. Days don't get much warmer than 80 degrees Fahrenheit, and nights rarely drop below a cool 50 degrees, and for a time the skies are fairly sunny. In other words, the temperature isn't much of an issue.

At current there have been shown to be at least 8 large rooms in the convention center:
# The outer ‘Mall’—a large atrium-like structure that sits at the main entrance to the convention center.<ref>Mentioned in "[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=view&page=cbears The Care Bears Caper]" and "Ami's Song"</ref>
# The "Ceremony" room—where the Awards Ceremony is being held when the explosion of magic occurs<ref>Mentioned in "[[Xanadu]]" and several others</ref>
# The Judging Room—where the costumes are judged.<ref>This has been mentioned in passing, but, to the knowledge of the maintainer of the official archive, has not been directly described</ref>
# Lobby—the lobby where the convention center connects to the hotel.<ref name="lco">"[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=view&page=lcourage Liquid Courage]" and several others</ref>
# The Restaraunt/Food Court—this is where people at the con got their food.<ref name="lco"/>
# Adult Contest Room(s)—The con has always been split, with "Adult" and/or Pornographic costumes having their own judging and section of the convention.<ref>"[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=view&page=horseandrider Horse and Rider]" and others</ref>
# Dealers Room(s)—where else are you going to get nifty con schwag?<ref>"[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=view&page=slinx Slinx]" and others</ref>
# 'Main Ballroom'—The largest room of the Convention Center. This is the main floor of the con.<ref>"[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=view&page=farindeed Far Indeed from Sherwood Forest]" and almost every other story</ref>

The hotel itself has been described in nearly every story. It's at least 10 stories tall, has several different classes of rooms—including some meeting rooms large enough to a battalion of Clone Troopers and related Jedi. The hotel is very modern, with a wide mix of rooms—Eric Winters booked a complete suite of rooms for himself—but most people staying at the hotel for the con have "singles" – that is the smallest class of room, consisting of little more than a 15x20 foot room and an attached bathroom. And as a modern hotel, there aren't classic keys, but key-cards—a laminated paper card with a magnetic strip on the back<ref>Yes, like a cheap credit-card</ref>.

===The Aftermath===

When news of the event finally reached the world outside the convention the whole convention center was locked down – first by the Orlando police and later by the US Government. This lock-down lasted more than a week, as the government interviewed everyone that was transformed to determine if they posed a threat to the public. But the lock-down came too late and, as it covered such a large area, was as leaky as a sieve. People got out and left the grounds and people broke in (after dark) and stole things from the convention.<ref>See '[http://shadowwolf.keil-draco.com/archive.php?action=view&page=slinx Slinx]' for the latter</ref>

There are numerous Superheroes and super-powered people that escaped—including a number of ''Jedi'' and several characters from popular Anime like ''"DragonBall Z"''—and a lot of more "normal" transformations, including some people that don't appear to have transformed at all. But most people stayed at the convention center—the hotel finding room to house them<ref>presumably at the governments expense, though this has not, [[User:ShadowWolf|to my knowledge]], been discussed. Although it may be that Eric Winters is paying for it all</ref>.

During the week or two after the event and during the period of the quarantine the Superheroes that have not left the convention center grounds have banded together and begun working as an unofficial security detail. Those transformed into characters from "Star Wars" have split into a few factions. The largest one, composed mostly of stormtroopers and villains from the movies, is the 501ist, but a different one, composed of clone troopers, has begun following "Revan" – a Jedi from the "Knights of the Old Republic" video game. The government hired one "Dr. Sands" – what was at the convention as "Dr. Benton Quest" – to handle the exit interviews with the transformed people.

When the quarantine was lifted and the hotel returned to normal most people returned to their old lives. But there are several groups that have sprung up – the government has setup a program that recruits the transformed people with special abilities, with the mandate of determining how a lot of the technology that came from the transformation works so that it can be replicated. There is also a group based around a company calling itself "The Real Stark Industries", centered around someone that went to Xanadu as Iron Man and who gained Tony Starks remarkable intelligence and inventive spirit.

==Setting Rules==

# People become what their costume represents to them—not necessarily exactly what they were dressed as in every detail. Thus, two people with identical costumes might turn into two different things; for instance, one person in a mouse costume might become a normal mouse, whereas someone else in an identical costume might become a mouse morph. In either case the person could potentially become mouse-sized. A person in a Godzilla costume could become a dozen stories tall—unless the wearer thought of himself as a human-sized Godzilla.
# People can gain (or lose) powers and abilities due to what they were wearing. But it has to have been in their mind when they devised the costume, so two identical superheroes might not become equally powered, because one is a major fan and knows everything, but the other doesn't know that the character is immune to acid, or whatever.
# Transformations generally occur quickly, but exceptions can be made. Godzilla might start out human sized but grow over the next week or more into the huge beast we all know.
# No transformations or scenes should be written that another writer—or every other writer—would be REQUIRED to mention to prove they were there. So Godzilla will not become a dozen stories tall immediately, and your character won't demolish the hotel upon leaving.
# The transformation occurred throughout the hotel. You can write your transformation in your hotel room if you so wish.
# There are no rules for what happens to someone who is wearing only part of their costume when the change occurs. What happens then is up to you; I can think of four or five possibilities straight off. The details of how magical "super-technology" works is also unspecified, but for the most part it cannot be reverse engineered by current-day science, even by the person whose costume it was a part of. A stormtrooper cannot make a duplicate laser rifle, though he might be able to repair the one he has or perhaps make a ''replacement'' rifle if his old one is destroyed.
# The change IS reversible, if you so wish. For most people, getting back to normal is their goal, and it can theoretically be accomplished. A permanent cure should not be as easy as finding someone who was a wizard and asking him to cast a spell. This should be a very difficult thing and any cure should not be generally applicable to the Xanadu population at large. If you prefer your character to be absolutely and irrevocably stuck in their form until the end of time, then that's certainly allowed too.
# Mental changes depend, once more, on exactly how the person thought of himself. The mouse might become fully mentally a mouse and run for the nearest cracks, or he may retain full reason and even the ability to talk. The mouse morph might gain some instincts, or it might simply be himself in a new body. Godzilla might go on a rampage through Orlando, where the convention is set, or he might be terribly apologetic about stepping on those tourists. (It should be added that the rampage is discouraged, in keeping with rules 4 and 10.)
# In some cases the clothing a conventioneer was wearing was viewed as an integral part of what they were supposed to be. For example, a ballerina isn't a ballerina if she isn't wearing a tutu; she's just some ordinary girl. As a result, being "stuck in ballerina form" necessarily restricts what kind of clothing one can wear. If the subject tries to put on something inappropriate, the clothing can temporarily TF into something that is appropriate for as long as it's worn. The clothing TFs back to its original form when removed again. Alternately, inappropriate clothing may simply fall apart. Note that this clothing thing is entirely optional; authors can use it or not at their discretion.
# No world-shattering characters or events, please. Others want to write too.
# Remember, if in doubt, ask yourself if whatever it is you're thinking of doing will 1) help the plot, and 2) not destroy the setting for other writers. If the answer is yes to them both, it probably is legal. Probably.

==References==
<references />

User talk:Robotech Master/Deserted

2012-07-23T06:38:06Z

Antimatter: Created page with " == First Comment! == ---- Hey, I just finished reading this story, and Merging Traffic. I just want to say I love the new setting, an..."